Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: In your answer, try to use plural form 'flowers' consistently and avoid repetition like 'many colors to it'. Also, make your sentences clearer and more natural by using linking words such as 'because' and 'which'. For example, say 'I love flowers because they are beautiful and colorful, and they often have a lovely fragrance that refreshes the atmosphere at home.'

예시: Yes, I definitely love flowers because they are beautiful and colorful. I enjoy having fresh flowers at my home because they create a pleasant atmosphere and make me feel happy. Additionally, flowers often have a lovely fragrance which helps me to relax.

제안: Try to improve grammar and sentence structure. Use plural 'flowers' and correct verb forms. Also, connect ideas logically with linking words like 'because' and 'so'. For example, 'My sister absolutely loves flowers because she enjoys gardening. She often spends time planting many types of flowers in her backyard, which helps her to relax and feel rewarded.'

예시: Yes, my sister absolutely loves flowers because she enjoys gardening. She often spends time planting many types of flowers in her backyard, which helps her to relax and feel rewarded. Flowers also improve her mood quickly.

제안: Focus on correct prepositions and plural forms, and make your sentences clearer. Use linking words like 'especially' and 'because' properly. For example, say 'There are many flowers around my neighborhood, especially in public parks and gardens. During spring, many people plant flowers in their gardens or along the streets because they believe flowers bring happiness and improve mood with their fragrance.'

예시: Yes, there are many flowers around my neighborhood, especially in public parks and gardens. For example, during spring, many people plant flowers in their gardens or along the streets because they believe flowers bring happiness and can improve their mood due to their fragrance.

제안: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words like 'because' and 'especially' to connect ideas. For example, 'Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I find their colors and shapes very beautiful. Especially when I visit parks or gardens, I like to capture flowers as they begin to blossom. Taking photos helps me relax and feel connected with nature.'

예시: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I find their colors and shapes very beautiful. Especially when I visit parks or gardens, I like to capture flowers as they begin to blossom. Taking photos helps me relax and stay connected with nature.

제안: Work on sentence structure and clarity. Use correct phrases like 'send flowers' and 'on special occasions'. Also, complete your examples. For instance, say 'Yes, many people in my country send flowers to friends on special occasions such as weddings, birthdays, and anniversaries. Flowers are considered a beautiful gift to express emotions like love, gratitude, or sympathy.'

예시: Yes, many people in my country send flowers to friends on special occasions such as weddings, birthdays, and anniversaries. Flowers are considered a beautiful gift and a way to express emotions like love, gratitude, or sympathy.

× Yes, I definitely love flower because they are beautiful and colorful.

✓ Yes, I definitely love flowers because they are beautiful and colorful.

The word 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because the sentence refers to flowers in general, which is a plural concept. Using singular 'flower' here is incorrect when talking about them collectively.

× It contained many colors to it.

✓ It contains many colors.

The subject 'It' refers to 'flowers' which is plural, so the verb should be 'contain' or rephrased. Also, 'to it' is unnecessary. Correct form is 'It contains many colors.' or better 'They contain many colors.' Here, 'It' is ambiguous; better to use plural 'They'.

× For example, I enjoy having fresh flower at my home because they create a sense of place and an happiness and it helped me to refresh atmosphere.

✓ For example, I enjoy having fresh flowers at my home because they create a sense of place and happiness and help me refresh the atmosphere.

'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to multiple flowers. 'An happiness' is incorrect; 'happiness' is uncountable and does not take 'an'. 'It helped me' should be 'help me' to keep present tense consistent. Also, 'refresh atmosphere' needs 'the' before 'atmosphere'.

× Additionally, flower often have a lovely fragrance.

✓ Additionally, flowers often have a lovely fragrance.

'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' to agree with the plural verb 'have'. Singular 'flower' would require 'has'.

× Yes, my sister is a person who absolutely loves a flower.

✓ Yes, my sister is a person who absolutely loves flowers.

'A flower' is singular and specific, but here it refers to flowers in general, so plural 'flowers' is correct.

× She enjoys gardening an often spend her.

✓ She enjoys gardening and often spends her time gardening.

'An' should be 'and'. 'Spend her' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'spends her time' or 'spends time'. Also, verb agreement requires 'spends' for third person singular.

× We can planting many types of flower in her backyard because she found out that it had her to relax and reward.

✓ We can plant many types of flowers in her backyard because she found out that it helps her to relax and feel rewarded.

'Planting' should be 'plant' after modal 'can'. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'. 'It had her' is incorrect; correct is 'it helps her'. 'Reward' should be 'feel rewarded' or similar.

× Not only flower can make her mood.

✓ Not only flowers can improve her mood.

'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'. Also, 'make her mood' is incorrect; better to say 'improve her mood' or 'affect her mood'.

× Perfectly and change quickly.

✓ They change quickly and perfectly.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'They' as subject and rearranging words corrects the sentence.

× Yes, I think there are many flowers so rounded my neighborhood, especially in public park and garden.

✓ Yes, I think there are many flowers surrounding my neighborhood, especially in public parks and gardens.

'So rounded' is incorrect; correct is 'surrounding'. 'Public park and garden' should be plural 'public parks and gardens'.

× For example, during spring many people start to plant flower in their garden or along the street because they think flower and consider as a sense of happiness and they can change their mood because of its fragrance is.

✓ For example, during spring many people start to plant flowers in their gardens or along the street because they think flowers are a source of happiness and can change their mood because of their fragrance.

'Plant flower' should be 'plant flowers'. 'Garden' should be plural 'gardens'. 'Think flower and consider as a sense of happiness' is incorrect; better 'think flowers are a source of happiness'. 'Its fragrance is' is incomplete; better 'their fragrance'.

× Yes, I often take photo.

✓ Yes, I often take photos.

'Photo' should be plural 'photos' because it refers to multiple pictures taken regularly.

× Which flowers? Because I find their colors and shapes our very beautiful.

✓ Which flowers? Because I find their colors and shapes very beautiful.

'Our' is incorrect here; the correct pronoun is 'are' as a verb, not 'our' which is possessive.

× For example, when I was working in the park or visiting garden, I like to capture with flowers especially when they are turning to blossom.

✓ For example, when I was working in the park or visiting a garden, I like to capture photos of flowers especially when they are beginning to blossom.

'Visiting garden' needs an article 'a garden'. 'Capture with flowers' is incorrect; better 'capture photos of flowers'. 'Turning to blossom' is better expressed as 'beginning to blossom'.

× It's also helped me to relax and stay connected with nature.

✓ It also helps me to relax and stay connected with nature.

'It's helped' is past tense, but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'helps' is appropriate.

× Yes, many people in my country are friends and flowers to order on the special occasion such as wedding, birthday party, an anniversary for my opening flower are considered as a gift and a beautiful way to express emotion like love, gratitude or sympathy.

✓ Yes, many people in my country send flowers to friends on special occasions such as weddings, birthday parties, and anniversaries. Flowers are considered a gift and a beautiful way to express emotions like love, gratitude, or sympathy.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'are friends and flowers to order' is incorrect; should be 'send flowers to friends'. 'Wedding, birthday party, an anniversary' should be plural and with articles: 'weddings, birthday parties, and anniversaries'. 'For my opening flower' is unclear and removed. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'.