Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Старайтесь говорить более чётко и избегать лишних слов, которые не добавляют смысла. Например, не нужно упоминать пол, если это не важно для ответа. Постарайтесь сформулировать ответ более естественно и связно.

예시: No, I don't really like flowers myself, but I enjoy giving them to others as a gift.

제안: Ваш ответ содержит много неясных и неполных фраз. Постарайтесь строить предложения логично и использовать связующие слова, чтобы сделать ответ понятным и связным.

예시: Yes, many people around me love flowers because they enjoy their fragrance. For example, my girlfriend really likes receiving flowers as gifts.

제안: Избегайте повторений и старайтесь использовать более точные выражения. Также улучшите структуру предложения, чтобы ответ был более понятным и логичным.

예시: There are not many flowers growing naturally where I live because it's a city with few green spaces. However, there are several flower shops nearby where you can buy flowers at different prices.

제안: Ответ очень запутанный и непонятный. Постарайтесь отвечать прямо и ясно, используя простые предложения и избегая лишних слов.

예시: I don't usually take photos of flowers, but sometimes I take a few pictures when I find them beautiful.

제안: Ваш ответ содержит много грамматических ошибок и неясных выражений. Старайтесь использовать правильные конструкции и более чётко выражать мысли.

예시: Yes, many people in my country often send flowers to others. Receiving flowers is a common way to show attention and appreciation, especially among women.

× No, I really don't like any kind of flowers, but 'cause maybe, as you can see, I'm a man, but however I like to give flowers to somebody else.

✓ No, I really don't like any kind of flowers, but maybe, as you can see, I'm a man; however, I like to give flowers to somebody else.

The original sentence incorrectly uses multiple conjunctions ('but', ''cause', 'but however') together, which causes confusion. 'But' and 'however' serve similar purposes and should not be used consecutively. Also, ''cause' is informal and unclear here. The sentence is clearer and grammatically correct by using 'but maybe' and 'however' properly separated by a semicolon.

× Yes, probably. I can say a number of people in my surroundings like flowers. And because of the. Blow, something they really enjoyed because of smells. Maybe you said the fragments or make maybe appear as if. Thanks sort of the gift as example can see my girlfriend who enjoy flowers.

✓ Yes, probably. I can say a number of people around me like flowers because they really enjoy the smell. For example, my girlfriend enjoys flowers.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear, with incomplete thoughts and incorrect word usage ('because of the. Blow', 'Maybe you said the fragments'). The correction combines ideas into clear, complete sentences and corrects verb agreement ('enjoy' to 'enjoys').

× Probably not because I live in the city and as you know there is no such kind of green green spaces where can find out trees or any kind of sort of thought that appears out of the ground.

✓ Probably not because I live in the city and, as you know, there are no green spaces where you can find trees or any kind of plants that grow from the ground.

The original sentence has incorrect use of 'there is' when referring to plural 'green spaces' and awkward phrasing ('sort of thought that appears out of the ground'). The correction uses 'there are' for plural and replaces unclear phrases with 'plants that grow from the ground' for clarity.

× However, in my neighborhood I easily can find out am any sort of flower shops based on your budget.

✓ However, in my neighborhood, I can easily find many flower shops to suit your budget.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and articles ('find out am any sort of flower shops'). The correction uses correct word order and prepositions ('find many flower shops') and clarifies meaning with 'to suit your budget'.

× So you're putting me in the position that the teachers, the fact that I don't practice some sort of. Are taking photos in their left, however I might take some for a few photos of the flowers when I have that option.

✓ So you're putting me in the position of a teacher, implying that I don't practice taking photos in my life; however, I might take a few photos of flowers when I have the option.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear with incomplete thoughts and incorrect phrases ('some sort of. Are taking photos in their left'). The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, in my country there is a lot of people who love to send the flower with no recent mostly often.

✓ Yes, in my country there are a lot of people who love to send flowers quite often.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'there is' with plural 'people' and awkward phrasing ('with no recent mostly often'). The correction uses 'there are' and replaces unclear phrases with 'quite often' for natural expression.

× That's why receiving flowers it some kind of daily routine that most of the girls are see and appreciate that sort of.

✓ That's why receiving flowers is a kind of daily routine that most girls see and appreciate.

The original sentence has extra words ('it') and awkward phrasing ('most of the girls are see'). The correction removes unnecessary words and corrects verb usage for clarity.

× That sort of gives that represent a pink of the attention said given at the moment.

✓ That kind of gift represents a token of attention given at the moment.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and words ('gives that represent a pink of the attention said'). The correction replaces unclear words with appropriate nouns and verbs for clear meaning.