Names— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms (e.g., “does” vs “do/does have”), remove fillers (uh, um), and organize the response with a clear topic sentence then one specific supporting detail. Keep it within 2–4 sentences. Use linking phrases like “however” or “because” correctly.

예시: No, my name doesn’t have any particular meaning, but I like it because it sounds beautiful. My mother chose it after a friend suggested a similar name, Eradis, and she adapted it slightly. Overall, I’m happy with the choice.

제안: Clarify intent and correct vocabulary: the answer is confusing and contains incorrect words (e.g., “managers”). State a clear position in one sentence, then explain the reason with a specific method or example. Avoid repetition and fillers.

예시: I would choose names that have personal meaning rather than copying relatives’ names. For example, I might combine parts of my partner’s and my own names or pick a name that reflects our cultural background, so the child has a unique identity.

제안: Make the answer concise and precise: give a direct topic sentence, then provide specific details about which relatives share names. Remove hesitations and repetitive phrases.

예시: No, I don’t share my exact name with anyone in my family. However, my brother shares a middle name with our father and grandfather, which is a family tradition passed down for generations.

제안: Improve coherence and specificity: state the difference clearly, then give concrete examples (e.g., types of traditional names vs modern trendy names). Use linking words like “for example” and correct phrases (“based on religion”).

예시: Yes. Nowadays names tend to be less formal and more creative. For example, older generations often chose traditional or religious names with specific meanings, whereas younger parents prefer trendy or unique names that reflect personal taste rather than tradition.

제안: Be specific and culturally accurate: avoid irrelevant examples from other countries (Jose, Maria). Name examples common in China or describe the trend (e.g., combining parents’ names). Structure answer: topic sentence, then specific examples and brief explanation.

예시: Yes. Certain names are very common, and recently some parents create unique names by combining characters from the father’s and mother’s names. For instance, a child might be given a name that blends two meaningful characters to form a new, distinctive name.

× I don't think that my name have uh, any special meaning.

✓ I don't think that my name has, uh, any special meaning.

The subject 'my name' is singular and requires the singular verb form 'has' not 'have'. Use 'has' to agree with the singular subject. Suggestion: remember that third-person singular subjects (he/she/it or singular nouns like 'my name') take verbs with -s in present tense.

× I know my mother gave me this name because she has a friend that said that she names Eradis.

✓ I know my mother gave me this name because she had a friend who said that she named her Eradis.

Sequence of past events requires past tense: 'gave' is past, so related actions should be past as well. 'Has a friend' should be 'had a friend'. Use 'who' for people instead of 'that'. 'Said that she names Eradis' is awkward; use 'named her Eradis' to show past naming. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when describing past events and use 'who' for people.

× It was fault, but.

✓ It was a mistake, though.

'It was fault' is ungrammatical; 'fault' needs an article and is not the usual collocation here. 'A mistake' or 'an error' fits. 'But' at end is informal; 'though' is more natural. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'a mistake' and place conjunctions correctly.

× I same for the next 4 generations.

✓ I would do the same for the next four generations.

The original lacks an auxiliary and uses 'same' incorrectly. Use 'would do the same' to express intention for future hypothetical generations. Also write numbers in words in formal speech transcripts. Suggestion: include appropriate modal 'would' for hypothetical actions and use full phrase 'do the same'.

× I'll choose uh his or her name based on on managers like me.

✓ I'll choose his or her name based on my preferences as a parent.

The phrase 'based on on managers like me' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Based on' should be followed by a clear noun phrase; 'managers like me' is irrelevant. Likely intended meaning is choosing according to personal preference as a parent. Suggestion: replace unclear prepositional phrase with a clear reason or criterion.

× I don't want to give a name to my son or my daughter because of someone gave me before on our family.

✓ I don't want to give a name to my son or daughter just because someone in our family gave that name before.

Pronoun and clause issues: 'because of someone gave me before on our family' is ungrammatical. Use 'because someone in our family gave that name before' or 'just because it was used before in our family'. Suggestion: place 'because' before a clause and use 'in our family' for location.

× No, nobody in my family has the same name as me, but for example, my brother has the same name or second name, uh, that my father and my grandfather and it, uh, he has the same name that my, umm, uh, grandfather's as well.

✓ No, nobody in my family has the same name as me, but for example, my brother has the same given name or middle name as my father and my grandfather; he shares my grandfather's name as well.

Original is repetitive and has unclear possessive and relative clauses. Use 'has' correctly with singular 'my brother' and clarify comparisons: 'the same given name or middle name as my father and my grandfather'. Use possessive 'grandfather's' appropriately. Suggestion: simplify and reorder to show parallel structure and correct possessives.

× I in my opinion the old generations have names, uh, very very formal based on religions things.

✓ In my opinion, older generations have very formal names based on religious traditions.

Word order and tense: 'I in my opinion' is redundant; start with 'In my opinion'. 'Old generations' should be 'older generations'. 'Religions things' is incorrect; use 'religious traditions' or 'religious beliefs'. Suggestion: use 'in my opinion' at clause start and choose correct adjective forms.

× And right now we have more informal names not based in religion.

✓ And right now we have more informal names not based on religion.

Use the preposition 'based on' rather than 'based in' when indicating a basis or origin. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'based on' for abstract bases.

× For example, I think it's the same for many countries, For example, Jose and Maria Marta.

✓ For example, I think it's the same in many countries; names like Jose and Maria or Marta are common.

Sentence fragments and repetition: 'For example' repeated and 'For example, Jose and Maria Marta.' is a fragment. Clarify by connecting clauses and listing names properly. Suggestion: avoid fragments by ensuring each example is part of a complete sentence.

× There are many names that are very popular in my country.

✓ There are many names that are very popular in my country.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. (No applicable error from provided list.)

× And a few years ago I started a new things that father combines, for example, the name of the father and the name of the mother and create a new name and unique name.

✓ A few years ago, a new practice began where fathers combine the father's name and the mother's name to create a new, unique name.

Original mixes tenses and has plural/singular and word choice errors: 'started a new things that father combines' is ungrammatical. Use passive or active clear structure: 'a new practice began' or 'people started a new practice'. Use parallel infinitives 'to create a new, unique name'. Suggestion: rephrase to a concise clause and maintain consistent tense.

× So that's very. Right now as well.

✓ So that's very popular right now as well.

'So that's very.' is incomplete; needs an adjective like 'popular'. Combine with 'right now as well' into a single coherent statement. Suggestion: complete the adjective and merge fragments.