Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and provides good details, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect naturalness. For example, "The local are" should be "The locals are," and "I really enjoy and tranquil views" is incomplete and unclear. Try to use complete sentences and check subject-verb agreement. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas more smoothly.

예시: My hometown is Manigansh, located in the Dhaka division. It is a serene city along a picturesque river, known for its peaceful atmosphere. The locals are very friendly and welcoming, and I always enjoy the tranquil views and warm hospitality when I visit.

제안: Your answer addresses the question well but ends abruptly and contains some awkward phrasing, such as "makes my hometown under a wonderful place." Make sure to complete your sentences and use correct expressions. Also, try to avoid repeating the same idea twice (friendly and welcoming). Instead, add more specific details or examples to enrich your answer.

예시: I like my hometown mainly because of the warmth and hospitality of its people. They often treat visitors like close family members, which creates a kind and inviting atmosphere. This makes my hometown a wonderful place to live, and I hope to spend most of my life there.

제안: Your answer is clear and well-structured, but some phrases could be more natural. For example, "for my study purpose as a student" can be simplified to "to study." Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, such as "although" or "but."

예시: I have lived in my hometown since childhood and hardly remember ever leaving it. However, I recently moved to Dhaka to study. Whenever I have free time, I visit my hometown, and after I get married, I plan to settle there permanently with my family.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is incomplete and contains grammatical errors, such as "It is a rural and remote areas" (should be singular or plural consistently) and "entertainment option" (should be plural). Also, the last sentence is unfinished. Make sure to complete your thoughts and use linking words like "therefore" or "because" to connect ideas logically.

예시: In my opinion, my hometown might not be ideal for young people because it is a rural and remote area with limited facilities and entertainment options. Therefore, many young people find it difficult to stay engaged, which makes it less attractive for them to live there.

× The local are very friendly and welcoming and whenever I visit I really enjoy and tranquil views and the warm hospitality they offer.

✓ The locals are very friendly and welcoming, and whenever I visit, I really enjoy the tranquil views and the warm hospitality they offer.

The word 'local' should be pluralized to 'locals' to agree with the plural verb 'are'. Also, the sentence was missing the article 'the' before 'tranquil views', and a comma is needed before 'and whenever' to separate clauses properly.

× This kind and inviting atmosphere makes my hometown under a wonderful place to live, and I hope to spend my.

✓ This kind and inviting atmosphere makes my hometown a wonderful place to live, and I hope to spend my life there.

The phrase 'makes my hometown under a wonderful place' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'makes my hometown a wonderful place'. Also, the sentence was incomplete; adding 'life there' completes the thought.

× It is a rural and remote areas, so there are limited facilities and entertainment option available.

✓ It is a rural and remote area, so there are limited facilities and entertainment options available.

The phrase 'a rural and remote areas' mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly. It should be 'a rural and remote area' (singular). Also, 'entertainment option' should be plural 'entertainment options' to agree with 'limited' and the plural noun 'facilities'.