Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more precise and avoid redundancy. For example, clarify the location clearly and improve sentence structure. Also, avoid incomplete sentences like 'and I like.'

예시: My hometown is Tandoori Gardens, which is located in the Philippines. I love it because it is calm and serene, and the neighborhood is very friendly. Additionally, it is close to the beach, which makes it a beautiful place to live.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by providing more specific details. Also, avoid repeating 'I like' multiple times.

예시: I really appreciate the friendly neighborhood and the peaceful atmosphere in my hometown. Moreover, the local food, especially the barbeque, is incredibly delicious and unlike anything I've tasted elsewhere.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use complete sentences. Avoid vague phrases like 'shorter than my new city' and 'I still love old.'

예시: I lived in my hometown for 16 years before moving to another city to attend college. Although I have lived longer in my new city, I still love my hometown very much.

제안: Your answer is clear and well-structured but can be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence.

예시: I believe my hometown is an excellent place for young people. Firstly, the friendly neighborhood creates a welcoming environment. Additionally, the calm and peaceful atmosphere allows young people to relax and enjoy their lives.

× I love my hometown because the place is calm, serene and the neighbor.

✓ I love my hometown because the place is calm, serene, and the neighborhood is friendly.

The pronoun 'the neighbor' is incorrect here; it should be 'the neighborhood' to refer to the area around the home. Also, the sentence structure was incomplete, so adding 'is friendly' clarifies the meaning.

× Moreover, our place is near the beach and I like.

✓ Moreover, our place is near the beach, and I like it.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'I like.' Adding 'it' completes the sentence and clarifies what is liked.

× Even if I live outside my hometown, shorter than my new city, I still love old.

✓ Even if I live outside my hometown, shorter than my new city, I still love it.

The pronoun 'old' is incorrect here; it should be 'it' to refer back to 'my hometown.' This correction clarifies the meaning.