Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应避免重复和语法错误，句子应更简洁自然。例如，'My hometown is Dalian, a beautiful city in northeast China with about 3 million people. It gets very crowded during peak seasons.'

예시: My hometown is Dalian, a beautiful city in northeast China with about 3 million people. It gets very crowded during peak seasons.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，应更流畅且具体。建议使用连接词使内容连贯，如：'I like the food, especially fresh seafood in autumn because my hometown is near the sea. Moreover, we have various meats like beef, lamb, and pork, which are often barbecued.'

예시: I like the food, especially fresh seafood in autumn because my hometown is near the sea. Moreover, we have various meats like beef, lamb, and pork, which are often barbecued.

제안: 回答应更自然流畅，避免重复和语法错误。可以说：'I have lived there for 22 years since I was born. Over the years, I have witnessed its rapid development, and I feel proud to be from Dalian.'

예시: I have lived there for 22 years since I was born. Over the years, I have witnessed its rapid development, and I feel proud to be from Dalian.

제안: 回答应更简洁且避免重复，使用连接词使内容连贯。例如：'Yes, my hometown is great for young people because they can work, socialize, and enjoy beautiful beaches. Also, the friendly citizens are always willing to help.'

예시: Yes, my hometown is great for young people because they can work, socialize, and enjoy beautiful beaches. Also, the friendly citizens are always willing to help.

× Uh, is, uh, about thir 30,000 people in it, but in the peak time it's really crowded.

✓ Uh, there are about thirty thousand people in it, but at peak times it's really crowded.

句子中缺少了表示存在的there be结构，正确表达应为"there are about thirty thousand people"，表示“有大约三万人”。此外，"thir"是拼写错误，应为"thirty"。

× Uh, is, uh, about thir 30,000 people in it, but in the peak time it's really crowded.

✓ Uh, there are about thirty thousand people in it, but at peak times it's really crowded.

"in the peak time"用法不正确，应该用复数形式"at peak times"表示“在高峰时段”。

× I mean, the food food they are really attracts me.

✓ I mean, the food really attracts me.

句中"the food food they are"结构重复且多余，且"they"指代不明确，应直接说"the food really attracts me"。

× Uh, is, is near the sea, so there are a lot of fresh seafoods when it's in autumn.

✓ Uh, it is near the sea, so there is a lot of fresh seafood in autumn.

句子缺少主语"it"，且"seafoods"不可数名词应用单数形式"seafood"。

× What's more, it's also be delayed through the main line beside to the mainland.

✓ What's more, it's also connected through the main line beside the mainland.

"it's also be delayed"语法错误，应使用正确的动词形式"it's also connected"，且"beside to"应为"beside"。

× What's more, it's also be delayed through the main line beside to the mainland.

✓ What's more, it's also connected through the main line beside the mainland.

"beside to"是不正确的搭配，正确用法是"beside"，表示“在……旁边”。

× So I can eat, uh, many kinds of meat like beef, lamb and pork and with barbecue and so on.

✓ So I can eat many kinds of meat like beef, lamb, and pork, with barbecue and so on.

句中"and with barbecue"连接不当，应改为逗号分隔，且去掉多余的"and"。

× During the 22 years I see how rapidly it de developed and I'm really honored that I'm honored to be one season in Dalian.

✓ During the 22 years, I have seen how rapidly it has developed, and I'm really honored to be a resident in Dalian.

"I see"应使用现在完成时"I have seen"，"de developed"拼写错误，应为"developed"，"one season"用词不当，应为"a resident"表示“居民”。

× I'm really honored that I'm honored to be one season in Dalian.

✓ I'm really honored to be a resident in Dalian.

句子重复使用"I'm honored"，且"one season"用词错误，应改为"a resident"。

× I love there.

✓ I love it there.

"love"后面需要宾语，"there"是副词，缺少宾语"it"。

× I mean, the citizen in the city are all very friendly, uh, most very friendly and they are really willing to help you.

✓ I mean, the citizens in the city are all very friendly, most very friendly, and they are really willing to help you.

"citizen"应使用复数形式"citizens"，表示“市民们”。

× I mean, the citizen in the city are all very friendly, uh, most very friendly and they are really willing to help you.

✓ I mean, the citizens in the city are all very friendly, most very friendly, and they are really willing to help you.

"most very friendly"表达不自然，建议改为"mostly very friendly"或直接省略"most"。

× And there are beautiful beaches which you can take a walk.

✓ And there are beautiful beaches where you can take a walk.

"which you can take a walk"不正确，应该用关系副词"where"引导定语从句，表示“你可以散步的地方”。