Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about what you like to do and see in Dhaka.

예시: My hometown is Dhaka, the capital of Bangladesh. It is a very busy and crowded place; however, I love it because there are many interesting places to visit and activities to enjoy, such as exploring historical sites and tasting local street food.

제안: Be careful with word choice and grammar. Instead of 'healthfully', use 'healthy' or 'health-conscious'. Also, clarify 'my cities' to 'my city'. Provide more specific examples to support your points.

예시: I like my city, especially the friendly people and delicious food. For example, the local markets offer a variety of tasty and affordable dishes that reflect our culture.

제안: Use correct tense and sentence structure, such as 'I have lived here for 25 years.' Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'built a building to our lives.' Also, separate ideas into clear sentences and add linking words for coherence.

예시: I have lived in Dhaka for 25 years. Twenty-five years ago, my father built our family home here. Since then, the city has become very modern compared to other places in Bangladesh.

제안: Avoid repetition like 'in our in our'. Use more precise vocabulary, for example, 'South Asia region'. Also, explain why it is good for young people with specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Absolutely, Dhaka is a very modern city in the South Asia region. Moreover, the people are humble and peaceful, which creates a safe and welcoming environment. Therefore, I believe it is a perfect place for young people to live and grow.

× Uh, this is very busy and crowded place.

✓ Uh, this is a very busy and crowded place.

In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. 'Place' is a singular countable noun, so it needs the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× I like my cities, people and food because everyone is friendly and healthfully and the food is very tasty and cheap.

✓ I like my city, people and food because everyone is friendly and healthy and the food is very tasty and cheap.

The word 'cities' should be singular 'city' because the speaker refers to their hometown, which is one city. Also, 'healthfully' is an adverb, but the adjective 'healthy' is needed to describe people.

× I live here since 25 years, uh, 25 years ago, my father built a building to our lives and this is very modern city in Bangladesh.

✓ I have lived here for 25 years. Twenty-five years ago, my father built a building for our lives, and this is a very modern city in Bangladesh.

When expressing duration from the past until now, the present perfect tense 'have lived' with 'for' is used. Also, 'built a building to our lives' is incorrect; 'built a building for our lives' is better. 'This is very modern city' needs the article 'a' before 'very modern city'.

× this is very modern city in Bangladesh.

✓ this is a very modern city in Bangladesh.

Singular countable nouns require an article. 'City' is singular and countable, so it needs the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× this is a very modern city in our in our South Asia site

✓ this is a very modern city in our South Asia region

The phrase 'in our South Asia site' is incorrect. The correct preposition and noun phrase is 'in our South Asia region' or 'in South Asia'.

× That's why I can suggest you this is a perfect place for young people.

✓ That's why I can suggest to you that this is a perfect place for young people.

The verb 'suggest' requires the preposition 'to' before the indirect object 'you'. Also, 'that' is needed to introduce the clause.