Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Instead of saying 'the north part of Bangladesh', you can say 'northern Bangladesh'. Also, avoid redundancy like 'born and raised' followed by 'strong connection with those places' which is a bit vague. Try to directly state your connection to each place.

예시: I'm originally from Rangpur in northern Bangladesh, but I was born and raised in Dhaka, so I feel connected to both cities.

제안: Your answer is good but you can improve coherence by using linking words and avoid minor errors like 'Rampur' instead of 'Rangpur'. Also, try to add a concluding sentence to make your answer more complete.

예시: I like the peaceful environment in Rangpur because it is less crowded than Dhaka, and the air feels fresh. Moreover, I enjoy the green fields and the natural beauty around the area, which makes it a relaxing place to visit.

제안: Your answer is understandable but the sentence structure is a bit awkward and contains grammatical errors. Try to use simpler and clearer sentences, and avoid redundancy like 'a little few days'. Also, use linking words to improve flow.

예시: I haven't lived there permanently. However, during my childhood, I used to visit Rangpur with my parents for short vacations or holidays.

제안: Your answer covers many points but can be improved by using better linking words and correcting grammar (e.g., 'works' should be 'work'). Try to combine sentences to avoid choppiness and make your answer more coherent.

예시: Although my hometown is developing rapidly, the natural beauty is slowly disappearing. Moreover, there are limited job opportunities, so many people, especially young ones, move to cities like Dhaka or even abroad for better employment. Most locals work in agriculture, small businesses, government offices, or local shops.

× I have strong connection with those places.

✓ I have strong connections with those places.

The noun 'connection' should be plural 'connections' because it refers to multiple places, indicating more than one connection.

× I like the peaceful environment in Rampur.

✓ I like the peaceful environment in Rangpur.

The place name is misspelled as 'Rampur' instead of 'Rangpur'. Although this is not a grammar issue, it is important for clarity and correctness.

× The natural beauty slowly disappearing.

✓ The natural beauty is slowly disappearing.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' to form the present continuous tense. This is a sentence structure issue but relates to verb usage.

× Some also works in government office or local shops.

✓ Some also work in government offices or local shops.

The verb 'works' should be 'work' to agree with the plural subject 'Some'. Also, 'office' should be plural 'offices' to match 'local shops'.

× I used to go there in my vacation or holidays with my parents just for a little few days.

✓ I used to go there on my vacation or holidays with my parents just for a few days.

The preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to 'vacation or holidays'. Also, 'a little few days' is incorrect; it should be 'a few days'.