Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "even it's crowded and quiet polluted." Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid redundancy. Also, replace "quiet" with "quite" for correct meaning. Keep your answer concise and natural.

예시: I grew up in Tehran, a city full of my childhood memories. I have many old friends there, and I love my hometown despite it being crowded and quite polluted.

제안: Your answer has good content but is interrupted by many fillers like "uh" and some unclear phrases such as "VE vibrant" and "make it lively and enjoy." Try to reduce fillers, use linking words for coherence, and correct vocabulary to express your ideas clearly and naturally.

예시: I like my hometown because of its historical places. For example, the Grand Bazaar and the National Museum showcase its rich history, while modern attractions like Milad Tower and Tabiat Bridge make the city lively and enjoyable.

제안: Your answer conveys the message but has grammatical mistakes such as "I lived" instead of "I have lived" and "all of my childhood memories was built" instead of "were made." Also, the phrase "in few years" should be "a few years ago." Use correct tenses and clearer expressions for better accuracy.

예시: I have lived in Tehran since I was born, and all my childhood memories were made there. However, a few years ago, I moved to another city for university and now live away from my family.

제안: Your answer is repetitive with many fillers like "uh" and "umm," which affect fluency. Also, the phrase "facilities and equipment" is vague. Try to use more precise vocabulary and link your ideas smoothly. Avoid overusing fillers to sound more confident and natural.

예시: Yes, definitely. Tehran, as the capital of Iran, offers many facilities and numerous job opportunities for young people. However, it also faces challenges like heavy pollution and overcrowding.

× I really love my hometown, even it's crowded and quiet polluted.

✓ I really love my hometown, even though it's crowded and quite polluted.

The conjunction 'even' is incorrectly used here; the correct phrase is 'even though' to introduce a contrast. Also, 'quiet' is a misspelling of 'quite' which means 'very' or 'fairly'.

× even it's crowded and quiet polluted.

✓ even though it's crowded and quite polluted.

The word 'quiet' is an adjective meaning silent, but the intended meaning is 'quite' which is an adverb modifying 'polluted'.

× like Golden Palace, a Grand Bazaar and the National Museum uh show its rich history, while modern attraction uh, like Milla Tower, Tabiat Bridge and Lola Park make it lively and enjoy.

✓ like Golden Palace, the Grand Bazaar and the National Museum show its rich history, while modern attractions like Milad Tower, Tabiat Bridge and Laleh Park make it lively and enjoyable.

The preposition 'a' before 'Grand Bazaar' is incorrect; 'the' is appropriate for specific places. Also, 'attraction' should be plural 'attractions' to match the list. 'Enjoy' should be 'enjoyable' as an adjective describing the city.

× modern attraction uh, like Milla Tower, Tabiat Bridge and Lola Park make it lively and enjoy.

✓ modern attractions like Milad Tower, Tabiat Bridge and Laleh Park make it lively and enjoyable.

The noun 'attraction' should be plural 'attractions' because it refers to multiple places. Also, 'enjoy' is incorrect here; 'enjoyable' is the correct adjective.

× I lived in Tehran since I was born and all of my childhood memories was built in that city.

✓ I have lived in Tehran since I was born and all of my childhood memories were built in that city.

The present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate for an action continuing from the past to present. Also, 'memories' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' not 'was'.

× But in few years, because I started my university, I had to move to another city and I'm not with my family in my hometown.

✓ But a few years ago, because I started university, I had to move to another city and I'm not with my family in my hometown.

The phrase 'in few years' is incorrect; 'a few years ago' is the correct expression to indicate past time. Also, 'my university' is better as 'university' without 'my' in this context.

× bad things about Tehran is it's so polluted and so crowded.

✓ bad things about Tehran are that it's so polluted and so crowded.

The subject 'bad things' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'it's' is a contraction of 'it is' which is correct here, but the sentence structure needs 'are that' to connect the plural subject with the explanation.