Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, ví dụ như 'hung in ruins' không phù hợp với ngữ cảnh và 'fattest developing cities' là cách dùng sai từ. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trả lời rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm sai. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và có cấu trúc rõ ràng.

예시: My hometown is Hung Yen, located in the northern part of Vietnam. It is one of the fastest developing cities in the region, known for its growing industries and modern infrastructure.

제안: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngắt quãng như 'uh' và hoàn thành câu trả lời một cách đầy đủ. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lặp lại từ không cần thiết.

예시: I love my hometown because it offers excellent healthcare services and a strong education system. Moreover, the community is friendly and there are many parks and recreational areas.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn còn dài dòng và có lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I only have a strong connections' và câu chưa hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng thì đúng và câu hoàn chỉnh. Hãy thêm các chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

예시: I have lived in my hometown since I was born. My family, including my grandparents, has lived there for many generations, so I feel a strong connection to the place and many cherished memories.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn và câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh dùng từ không chính xác như 'motivate' trong ngữ cảnh này và thêm các chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm rõ ý.

예시: Yes, my hometown is a great place for young people because it offers many career opportunities and quality education. For example, there are several universities and companies that support their personal and professional growth.

× Hungin is located in Northern Park of Vietnam and is also considered ones of the fattest developing cities in the regions due to its growing industry and modern infrastructure.

✓ Hungin is located in the Northern part of Vietnam and is also considered one of the fastest developing cities in the region due to its growing industry and modern infrastructure.

The word 'ones' should be 'one' because it refers to a singular city. 'Fattest' is incorrect; the intended word is 'fastest' to describe rapid development. 'Northern Park' should be 'Northern part' to correctly describe the location. 'Regions' should be singular 'region' to match the context.

× So there are several reasons why I love my hometowns, but one of the most important is the availability of uh ex an excellent healthcare services and an education program.

✓ So there are several reasons why I love my hometown, but one of the most important is the availability of excellent healthcare services and an education program.

The word 'hometowns' should be singular 'hometown' because the speaker refers to one place. 'An excellent healthcare services' is incorrect because 'services' is plural and should not be preceded by 'an'. The article 'an' is removed to match plural 'services'.

× my family, including my grandparents has lived in the same place for many generations.

✓ my family, including my grandparents, has lived in the same place for many generations.

A comma is needed after 'grandparents' to set off the phrase 'including my grandparents'. The verb 'has' agrees with the singular collective noun 'family', so it is correct.

× Therefore I only have a strong connections with this place and up top of that it hold a lot of memories and.

✓ Therefore I only have strong connections with this place and on top of that it holds a lot of memories.

'A strong connections' is incorrect because 'connections' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. 'Up top of that' should be 'on top of that'. The verb 'hold' should be 'holds' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× Therefore I only have a strong connections with this place and up top of that it hold a lot of memories and.

✓ Therefore I only have strong connections with this place and on top of that it holds a lot of memories.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and', which is incomplete. It should be completed or the conjunction removed to form a complete sentence.

× Of course, I always motivate and encourage young people to live in my place because I believe it also provides them good opportunities for their career and personal life.

✓ Of course, I always motivate and encourage young people to live in my hometown because I believe it also provides them with good opportunities for their career and personal life.

The phrase 'live in my place' is vague; 'live in my hometown' is clearer. The phrase 'provides them good opportunities' should be 'provides them with good opportunities' to correctly use the verb 'provide' with its preposition.