Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên nói rõ ràng về địa điểm và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng, ví dụ như 'My hometown is in the northern part of Vietnam, in a province known for its beautiful landscapes and historical significance.' Ngoài ra, tránh dùng từ sai như 'doesn't know' mà nên dùng 'known'.

예시: My hometown is located in the northern part of Vietnam, in a province known for its beautiful landscapes and rich historical significance. It is not far from Hanoi, which makes it easily accessible for visitors who want to explore the area.

제안: Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trúc câu tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, thay vì 'sceneries' nên dùng 'the scenery'. Câu nên rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'everyone know' nên là 'everyone knows'. Hơn nữa, hãy dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

예시: What I really like about my hometown is the beautiful scenery. The vast green fields, rivers, and hills are stunning, and the air is very fresh. Moreover, it is a close-knit community where everyone knows each other, which creates a strong sense of belonging.

제안: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ dùng không phù hợp như 'It's bad' nên được sửa thành 'It's been good'. Bạn nên dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên kết ý rõ ràng hơn. Ví dụ, dùng 'except for a few years when I moved to Saigon for my studies, I have lived there most of my life.'

예시: I've lived in my hometown for most of my life, except for a few years when I moved to Saigon for my studies. However, I often returned to visit my family and enjoy the peaceful environment.

제안: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên sửa 'Why my hotel' thành 'My hometown', 'persuade their careers' thành 'pursue their careers'. Ngoài ra, câu nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn với liên từ phù hợp.

예시: My hometown offers a peaceful environment, but it might not be the best place for young people to pursue their careers, especially in industries like technology or finance. There are fewer job opportunities in these fields, so many young people choose to move to bigger cities.

× My hometown is in the northern part of Vietnam, in a province doesn't know for a beautiful landscape and historical significance.

✓ My hometown is in the northern part of Vietnam, in a province known for its beautiful landscape and historical significance.

The sentence lacks the correct form of 'there is/are' or a relative clause to describe the province. 'Doesn't know' is incorrect; it should be 'known' to indicate the province is famous for something. This is a 'There be issue' because the sentence structure incorrectly omits the verb needed to describe existence or characteristics.

× It's not too far from Hanoi, making it easy accessible for visitors who want to explore the area.

✓ It's not too far from Hanoi, making it easily accessible for visitors who want to explore the area.

The adverb 'easily' should be used instead of the adjective 'easy' to modify the adjective 'accessible'. This is an issue with adverb placement and adjective/adverb use, but since the list includes 'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs', it fits best here.

× What I really like about my hometown is sceneries.

✓ What I really like about my hometown is the scenery.

The word 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Using 'the scenery' correctly refers to the natural features collectively. This is a singular and plural issue.

× The last green fields, rivers and hills are beautiful and the air is only fresh.

✓ The lush green fields, rivers, and hills are beautiful and the air is very fresh.

'Last' is incorrect here; likely intended word is 'lush' to describe greenery. Also, 'only fresh' is incorrect; 'very fresh' or 'so fresh' is appropriate. This is an incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs.

× It's also very close community with everyone know each other but to create a strong sense of belonging.

✓ It's also a very close community where everyone knows each other, which creates a strong sense of belonging.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'very close community', and 'with everyone know each other' is incorrect; it should be 'where everyone knows each other'. Also, 'but to create' is incorrect; 'which creates' fits better. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and sentence structure.

× I've been living in my hometown for most of my life.

✓ I have lived in my hometown for most of my life.

The present perfect simple 'have lived' is more appropriate here than present perfect continuous 'have been living' because the action is a state rather than an ongoing activity. This is a present tense issue.

× It's bad, except for a few years when I moved to Saigon for my studies.

✓ It's been good, except for a few years when I moved to Saigon for my studies.

'It's bad' is incorrect in this context; likely intended meaning is 'It's been good'. This is an incorrect use of adjectives.

× But I often returned to visit families and enjoy the peaceful environment.

✓ But I often returned to visit my family and enjoy the peaceful environment.

'Families' is plural and general; 'my family' is more appropriate here to indicate the speaker's own family. This is an incorrect use of pronouns/nouns.

× Why my hotel offers peaceful environment.

✓ My hometown offers a peaceful environment.

'Why my hotel' is incorrect and likely a typo for 'My hometown'. Also, 'peaceful environment' needs the article 'a'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and article errors.

× It might not be a best place for young people to persuade their careers, especially in industries like technologies or finance.

✓ It might not be the best place for young people to pursue their careers, especially in industries like technology or finance.

The article 'a' should be 'the' before 'best place' because 'best' is a superlative adjective. Also, 'persuade their careers' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'pursue'. 'Technologies' should be singular 'technology' when referring to the industry. This includes article errors and incorrect verb usage.

× There are fewer job opportunities in those fields so many young people to move to.

✓ There are fewer job opportunities in those fields, so many young people move away.

The sentence is incomplete and incorrectly structured. 'Many young people to move to' is incorrect; it should be 'many young people move away' or 'move to other places'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and sentence structure.