Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and direct, but it can be improved by adding a bit more detail to make it more natural and engaging. Try to include a brief description or a notable feature of your hometown to enrich your response.

예시: My hometown is Bishonatselet, a peaceful village located in the countryside surrounded by lush green fields and hills.

제안: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases which affect the natural flow. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Also, use clearer vocabulary and structure your answer with a topic sentence followed by specific supporting details using linking words.

예시: I like the peaceful atmosphere of my hometown because the environment is cozy and the weather is comfortable. Moreover, the friendly people make it easy to feel at home.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and hesitations. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid filler words. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

예시: I have lived in my hometown since I was born because it is my parents' house. Therefore, I know every corner of the town, which is very interesting and beautiful.

제안: Your answer has some unclear expressions and grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically. Also, avoid repetition and use appropriate vocabulary.

예시: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it offers many opportunities to explore different environments. This helps them develop their health and grow up in a comfortable and supportive atmosphere.

× I like the circumstance of my hometown.

✓ I like the atmosphere of my hometown.

The word 'circumstance' is incorrect here; 'atmosphere' or 'environment' better describes the feeling or surroundings of a place. Use appropriate adjectives or nouns to convey the intended meaning.

× Also, the environment is very cozy and the weather is very comfortable with, uh, ourselves.

✓ Also, the environment is very cozy and the weather is very comfortable for us.

The pronoun 'ourselves' is incorrectly used here; 'for us' is the correct prepositional phrase to indicate who finds the weather comfortable.

× Uh, we feel very umm, uh, adjustable with this, uh, environment in my hometown that makes fields me that, uh, I like this place very much.

✓ We feel very comfortable in this environment in my hometown, which makes me like this place very much.

The word 'adjustable' is incorrectly used; 'comfortable' fits better to express ease. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and needs simplification for clarity.

× I born here, I grew up here.

✓ I was born here, and I grew up here.

The verb 'born' requires the auxiliary verb 'was' to form the past passive voice. 'I born here' is incorrect; it should be 'I was born here'.

× because it's my father's and mother house.

✓ because it's my father's and mother's house.

The possessive form for both parents should be 'father's and mother's' to indicate possession correctly.

× It helps there to grow their grow up, their health and their ages.

✓ It helps them to grow, improve their health, and develop as they age.

The pronoun 'there' is incorrect; 'them' is appropriate to refer to young people. Also, the phrase 'grow their grow up' is redundant and incorrect; it should be simplified.

× Also because it's gives them a very cozy feels.

✓ Also, because it gives them a very cozy feeling.

The phrase 'it's gives' is incorrect; it should be 'it gives'. 'Feels' should be 'feeling' to correctly express the noun form.