Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but repeating the question at the start is unnecessary. Try to start directly with your answer to sound more natural. Also, instead of 'far western side', you can say 'far west' for conciseness.

예시: I'm originally from Mustang, which is located in the far west of Nepal.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using linking words and more specific vocabulary. For example, use 'because' to connect ideas and say 'mountain ranges' instead of 'range of mountain'.

예시: I love my hometown because of its beautiful environment and scenery. From my village, you can see stunning mountain ranges that create a peaceful atmosphere.

제안: Your answer is unclear and has some grammatical errors. Try to give a direct answer with clear structure and avoid repetition. For example, say how long you lived there and where you moved to.

예시: I lived in Mustang for the first five years of my life before moving to the city where I live now.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using more formal linking words like 'because' instead of 'cause' and by correcting grammar, such as 'good transportation' to 'good public transportation' and 'far from city' to 'far from the city'.

예시: I don't think my hometown is a good place for young people because it lacks good public transportation and is far from the city, which makes daily activities difficult.

× We can see a range of mountain from where my village is.

✓ We can see a range of mountains from where my village is.

The word 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains' because 'a range of' refers to multiple mountains, not just one.

× Currently I'm not living there.

✓ Currently, I do not live there.

The present continuous tense 'I'm not living' is less appropriate here; the simple present 'I do not live' is better to express a current state or fact.

× Maybe for the around.

✓ Maybe for a while around then.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear; it lacks proper structure and context. It should be rephrased to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× For the first five years of my life I lived there and moved to and I moved here.

✓ For the first five years of my life, I lived there and then I moved here.

The sentence is awkward and contains redundancy. Adding 'then' clarifies the sequence, and removing the extra 'moved to' improves clarity.

× I don't feel like my hometown is, uh, good for young people 'cause it doesn't have a good transportation.

✓ I don't feel like my hometown is good for young people because it doesn't have good transportation.

The article 'a' before 'good transportation' is incorrect because 'transportation' is an uncountable noun here; also, 'cause' should be written as 'because' in formal speech.

× It is very far from city, so people face difficulties in daily activities.

✓ It is very far from the city, so people face difficulties in daily activities.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'city' to specify a particular city; omitting it is incorrect.