Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và chính xác hơn về vị trí địa lý, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và giải thích rõ ràng hơn về đặc điểm văn hóa của quê hương.

예시: My hometown is Taiwan Province, which is a medium-sized city located in the northern part of Vietnam. It has well-developed facilities and a rich cultural heritage, including traditional etiquette and historical sites.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do bạn thích quê hương.

예시: What I like most about my hometown is that it is less competitive and stressful compared to big cities like Hanoi or Ho Chi Minh City. Therefore, people can enjoy a comfortable and peaceful life here, which many of my friends also appreciate.

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, mạch lạc và thêm liên từ để câu văn trôi chảy hơn.

예시: I have lived in Taiwan for most of my life because I was born and raised here. Although I have spent some time studying elsewhere, Taiwan has always been my home and I feel a strong connection to it.

제안: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng, tránh lỗi sai về danh từ số nhiều và cách liệt kê. Hãy sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về các tiện ích dành cho giới trẻ.

예시: Definitely yes, my hometown is a perfect place for young people because it has well-developed facilities such as gyms, schools, housing, and various leisure opportunities like yoga classes and hiking trails.

× My hometown is Taiwan province to be specific.

✓ My hometown is Taiwan province, to be specific.

A comma is needed before 'to be specific' to separate the main clause from the clarifying phrase, improving sentence clarity.

× It's a medium city with well developed facilities which is located in the northern part of Vietnam.

✓ It's a medium-sized city with well-developed facilities which is located in the northern part of Vietnam.

'Medium' should be 'medium-sized' to correctly describe the city size. 'Well developed' should be hyphenated as 'well-developed' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× And I shouldn't forget to mention that there are many time horror culture really in my hometown like etiquette, historical.

✓ And I shouldn't forget to mention that there are many traditional cultural aspects in my hometown like etiquette and history.

The original sentence contains unclear and incorrect phrases such as 'time horror culture really'. It should be corrected to 'traditional cultural aspects' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'historical' should be 'history' to fit the context.

× The most lovable things that I have found in my city is it is less competitive and stressful than this city like Hanoi or Ho Chi Minh City.

✓ The most lovable thing that I have found in my city is that it is less competitive and stressful than cities like Hanoi or Ho Chi Minh City.

'Things' is plural but followed by singular verb 'is'; it should be singular 'thing' to match the verb. Also, 'this city like Hanoi' should be 'cities like Hanoi' to correctly refer to multiple cities.

× So we may live in a comfy and cozy life in environment and some of my friend is also really loved.

✓ So we may live a comfortable and cozy life in a good environment, and some of my friends also really love it.

'Comfy' is informal; 'comfortable' is more appropriate. 'Life in environment' is incomplete; 'life in a good environment' is clearer. 'Some of my friend is' should be 'some of my friends are' to agree in number. 'Really loved' is incorrect; 'really love it' fits the context.

× Well, I have lived in Taiwan for most of my life.

✓ Well, I have lived in Taiwan for most of my life.

This sentence is correct in present perfect tense to indicate an action continuing up to now; no correction needed.

× I was born and raised here so that I have a strong connection to this city even though when I have spent time studying in other but Taiwan has always been my home.

✓ I was born and raised here, so I have a strong connection to this city even though I have spent time studying elsewhere, but Taiwan has always been my home.

Added commas for clarity. 'When I have spent time studying in other' is incorrect; it should be 'I have spent time studying elsewhere'. 'So that' is changed to 'so' for correct conjunction use.

× Definitely yes, my hometown is a perfect a place for young people to live in simply because the facility are well developed like include gym, school, house, table and even leisure facility and opportunity in my city as varies from education to yoga hunting.

✓ Definitely yes, my hometown is a perfect place for young people to live in simply because the facilities are well developed, including gyms, schools, houses, tables, and even leisure facilities and opportunities in my city, ranging from education to yoga and hunting.

'Facility' should be plural 'facilities' to agree with 'are'. 'Like include' is incorrect; 'including' is correct. Items listed should be plural where appropriate. 'Varies from' should be 'ranging from'. Added missing conjunctions and corrected word forms for clarity.