Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在重复问题句，且表达不够自然，最后一句话语法错误且含义不清。建议避免重复问题，改进语法，表达更自然流畅。

예시: My hometown is Shijo City, located in Jiangsu Province in southeast China. It is famous for its delicious food, and the local people are very friendly and helpful.

제안: 回答内容较为简单，缺少连贯的连接词，且有语法错误（like应为likes）。建议使用连接词丰富句子结构，并注意主谓一致。

예시: I like my hometown because it is a small city with various delicious foods, such as hot pork and barbecues. In fact, BBQ is a famous cuisine that almost every Shijo resident enjoys very much.

제안: 回答较完整且有逻辑，但句子稍显简单。建议使用更多连接词使表达更流畅自然。

예시: I was born and raised in my hometown for 22 years until I graduated from university. Then, I moved to Shanghai to start my first job because I wanted to pursue new opportunities and gain valuable work experience.

제안: 回答结构清晰，但最后一句不完整，缺少谓语动词。建议完善句子并使用连接词增强连贯性。

예시: It depends on an individual's personality. For those who enjoy a peaceful and simple life, my hometown is suitable. However, for ambitious people seeking more opportunities, big cities are a better choice.

× There are various delicious food, and the local people are approachable and friendly.

✓ There is various delicious food, and the local people are approachable and friendly.

这里的food是不可数名词，前面用are不正确，应该用is。

× They are willing to give hand to her.

✓ They are willing to give a hand to her.

短语是give a hand，缺少冠词a，且hand不是动名词形式。

× There are various delicious food such as hot pork and barbecues.

✓ There is various delicious food such as hot pork and barbecues.

food是不可数名词，前面用are不正确，应该用is。

× BBQ is a famous cuisine, almost every Shijou person like it very much.

✓ BBQ is a famous cuisine, almost every Shijou person likes it very much.

主语是every Shijou person，单数，谓语动词like应加s变为likes。

× I was born and raised there for 22 years until graduating from universities.

✓ I was born and raised there for 22 years until I graduated from university.

graduating应改为过去式graduated，且university通常用单数形式。

× After that, I moved to Shanghai for my first job.

✓ After that, I moved to Shanghai for my first job.

此句无错误，保持不变。

× I decided to move there and leave my hometown in order to pursue new opportunities and get valuable work experience.

✓ I decided to move there and leave my hometown in order to pursue new opportunities and get valuable work experience.

此句无错误，保持不变。

× It depends on individual's personality.

✓ It depends on an individual's personality.

individual前缺少冠词an，表示某个人的个性。

× For those people who enjoy peaceful and simple life, my hometown is suitable for them.

✓ For those people who enjoy peaceful and simple lives, my hometown is suitable for them.

life在此处应使用复数形式lives，表示多个人的生活。

× On the other hand, for those people who are ambitious to find more opportunities, I think big cities.

✓ On the other hand, for those people who are ambitious to find more opportunities, I think big cities are better.

句子缺少谓语动词，导致结构不完整，应补充谓语使句子完整。