Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm, đồng thời câu trả lời hơi dài và không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý phát âm tên địa danh và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp.

예시: My hometown is Bac Giang province, located in the northern part of Vietnam. It is famous for its delicious lychee fruit, which is a special feature of the area.

제안: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn. Hãy thêm các chi tiết cụ thể hơn về những điều bạn thích ở quê hương, sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I like my hometown because it holds many precious memories for me. Moreover, the friendly people and peaceful environment make it a special place in my heart.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản và chính xác, tránh lặp từ và nói rõ thời gian bạn đã sống ở đó.

예시: I was born in my hometown, but I have lived in Hanoi, the capital of Vietnam, for more than five years because of my work and career development.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích rõ lý do tại sao quê hương không phù hợp với người trẻ tuổi.

예시: I don't think my hometown is suitable for young people because there are limited opportunities for entertainment and career development compared to big cities.

× I I was born in Baghdad province, which is located in the north side of Vietnam and in my hometown.

✓ I was born in Baghdad province, which is located in the northern part of Vietnam, my hometown.

The phrase 'north side' is incorrect; it should be 'northern part' or 'north of'. Also, the sentence has a repeated 'I'. The present tense 'is located' is correct here because it describes a general fact.

× There are some special features that I like to share with you, but the most outstanding 1 is the lychee.

✓ There are some special features that I would like to share with you, but the most outstanding one is the lychee.

The number '1' should be written as the word 'one' in this context. Also, 'like' should be 'would like' for politeness and correctness.

× The most important factor that makes my hometown become special to me is the emotions and the feelings that this place brings to me because I was born in here there.

✓ The most important factor that makes my hometown special to me is the emotions and feelings that this place brings to me because I was born here.

The phrase 'born in here there' is incorrect; 'born here' is sufficient. Also, 'become special' is awkward; 'makes my hometown special' is better.

× I was born in there but to be a but actually I have lived in hundred capital of Vietnam for more than five years because I have to go to work and develop my own career.

✓ I was born there, but actually I have lived in the capital of Vietnam for more than five years because I have to work and develop my career.

The phrase 'born in there' should be 'born there'. 'Hundred capital' is incorrect; it should be 'the capital'. 'Go to work' can be simplified to 'work'. 'Develop my own career' is better as 'develop my career'.

× So Hanoi is the good choice for me.

✓ So Hanoi is a good choice for me.

The definite article 'the' is incorrect here; 'a good choice' is the correct form because it is one of many possible choices.

× I don't think that my hometown is suitable for the young like me because of the of the of this age teenagers who like to go outside and have more experience so live in the hometown is not.

✓ I don't think that my hometown is suitable for young people like me because teenagers of this age like to go outside and have more experiences, so living in the hometown is not suitable.

The sentence has repeated words 'of the of the of'. The phrase 'this age teenagers' should be 'teenagers of this age'. The ending 'so live in the hometown is not' is incomplete and needs to be corrected to 'so living in the hometown is not suitable'.