Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep it concise within 5 sentences.

예시: My hometown is a small town called Bernala. It is surrounded by beautiful green fields, which make it very peaceful. I really enjoy living there because of its calm and natural environment.

제안: Your answer has good intent but is unclear and contains awkward phrasing. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct vocabulary to express your thoughts naturally.

예시: One thing I like about my hometown is Gansai Park. It is a wonderful place where families and friends can spend quality time together. The park has beautiful natural surroundings and walking paths, which make it very relaxing.

제안: Your answer is too long and grammatically incorrect. Start with a direct answer to the question, then add brief supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Keep it simple and clear.

예시: I have lived in my hometown since I was born because it is my birthplace. Also, my parents live there, so I have stayed with them since childhood.

제안: Your answer provides relevant information but is wordy and contains grammatical mistakes. Use a clear topic sentence and link your supporting details logically. Use appropriate vocabulary and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it offers many facilities. For example, there are colleges for higher education, schools for secondary education, and reliable transport, water, and electricity services.

× It is smallest town in district Bernala.

✓ It is the smallest town in the district Bernala.

The sentence misses the definite article 'the' before 'smallest town' and 'district Bernala'. Also, 'smallest town' is singular and needs 'the' to specify it as unique. The definite article is necessary before superlative adjectives and specific places.

× because of greenfields surrounding the all around and it is very peaceful there.

✓ because of the greenfields surrounding all around, and it is very peaceful there.

The phrase 'surrounding the all around' is incorrect. 'All around' is an adverbial phrase and does not need 'the'. Also, 'greenfields' should be preceded by 'the' to specify particular fields. Correct preposition and article usage improves clarity.

× So I adore to live in.

✓ So I adore living there.

The verb 'adore' is followed by a gerund (-ing form), not an infinitive with 'to'. Also, 'live in' requires an object; 'there' is appropriate here. Hence, 'adore living there' is correct.

× There are number of qualities that my hometown has,

✓ There are a number of qualities that my hometown has,

The phrase 'a number of' is the correct quantifier to indicate several qualities. Omitting 'a' makes the phrase ungrammatical.

× by being the nature and The Walking pass.

✓ by being in nature and the walking path.

The phrase 'being the nature' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in nature'. Also, 'The Walking pass' seems to be a misnomer; 'walking path' is more appropriate. Capitalization of 'The' is unnecessary here.

× I live in my hometown since my birthday because it is my birthplace and my parents usually live in my hometown so that's why I also live there with them from my childhood here.

✓ I have lived in my hometown since my birthday because it is my birthplace, and my parents usually live there, so that's why I have also lived there with them since my childhood.

The present perfect tense 'have lived' is required to express an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Also, 'since' requires present perfect tense. The sentence is long and needs commas for clarity.

× Oh suddenly my hometown is good place for young people because there are number of facilities that are available in my hometown for young generations like college for higher studies, school for their senior, secondary education as well as good transport facilities, water facility, electricity facilities.

✓ Oh, suddenly my hometown is a good place for young people because there are a number of facilities available in my hometown for young generations, like colleges for higher studies, schools for their senior secondary education, as well as good transport facilities, water facilities, and electricity facilities.

The sentence misses the article 'a' before 'good place' and 'a number of' before 'facilities'. Also, 'college' and 'school' should be plural to match 'facilities'. 'Water facility' should be plural to be consistent. Commas and conjunctions are added for clarity.