Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Where is your hometown?
수험생
My hometown is a small city next to Paris whose name is Champs Olivine. It's not really the countryside because there are some shops and basic facilities, but there are no public transport like buses or trains.
시험관
What do you like about your home town?
수험생
What I really like about my hometown is the atmosphere. It's really peaceful and quiet. Besides, we also have a big forest, so it can be great to go in this forest in order to working.
시험관
How long have you lived there?
수험생
I have lived there for about 20 years, since I was a child. I think I stayed uh, because my parents also live there, so I feel like, uh, home to me.
시험관
Is your home town a good place for young people?
수험생
I don't think my hometown is a good place for young people because there are not many facilities like sport infrastructure or cinemas, for instance.
평가
총점
Part 1
Where is your hometown?
점수: 75.0제안: Votre réponse est claire mais pourrait être plus naturelle et concise. Évitez les phrases trop longues et améliorez la fluidité en utilisant des expressions plus courantes. Par exemple, au lieu de "whose name is Champs Olivine", dites simplement "called Champs Olivine". Aussi, corrigez "there are no public transport" en "there is no public transport".
예시: My hometown is a small city called Champs Olivine, located near Paris. It's not quite rural since it has some shops and basic facilities, but there is no public transport like buses or trains.
What do you like about your home town?
점수: 70.0제안: Votre réponse est bonne mais contient des erreurs grammaticales et un vocabulaire maladroit. Par exemple, "go in this forest in order to working" devrait être "go to the forest to work" ou "to relax". Essayez d'utiliser des mots plus précis et de corriger la grammaire pour rendre la réponse plus naturelle.
예시: What I really like about my hometown is its peaceful and quiet atmosphere. Also, we have a large forest nearby, which is a great place to go for a walk or to relax.
How long have you lived there?
점수: 65.0제안: Votre réponse est compréhensible mais contient des hésitations et des répétitions inutiles. Essayez de parler plus fluidement et d'éviter les "uh". De plus, reformulez "I feel like, uh, home to me" en "it feels like home to me" pour plus de naturel.
예시: I have lived there for about 20 years since I was a child. I stayed because my parents live there too, so it feels like home to me.
Is your home town a good place for young people?
점수: 80.0제안: Votre réponse est claire et directe, mais vous pouvez améliorer la fluidité en utilisant des mots de liaison et en donnant un exemple plus précis. Par exemple, utilisez "for example" au lieu de "for instance" et ajoutez une phrase pour expliquer pourquoi ces installations sont importantes.
예시: I don't think my hometown is a good place for young people because there aren't many facilities, for example, sports centers or cinemas. These places are important for young people to socialize and enjoy their free time.
문법
× ...so it can be great to go in this forest in order to working.
✓ ...so it can be great to go to this forest in order to work.
The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'go to' is the correct phrase when referring to visiting a place. Also, after 'in order to', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'working' should be 'work'.
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