Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to give a direct and clear response about your hometown, mentioning its name and some key features in a simple and natural way. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

예시: My hometown is Kathmandu, the capital city of Nepal. It is famous for its rich culture, many temples, and spiritual places. The city has a unique blend of tradition and modern life.

제안: Your answer is relevant but needs better structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about the weather and environment. Try to avoid fragmented sentences.

예시: I like many things about my hometown, but the weather is the best. Because it is near a forest and full of greenery, the air is always fresh. Also, since it is located on a hilltop, we can enjoy beautiful views of the city.

제안: Your answer gives the main information but is a bit disorganized. Focus on answering the question directly and avoid adding unrelated questions. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I have lived in my hometown for almost 24 years since I was born and raised here. I feel very attached to the environment and the peaceful society of this place.

제안: Your answer is relevant but needs clearer expression and better vocabulary. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why it is good for young people.

예시: Yes, my hometown is a great place for young people because it is less crowded than the city. It has many green areas and parks, and the people here are calm and helpful.

× My hometown is gone.

✓ My hometown is Kathmandu.

The pronoun 'gone' is incorrectly used here; it should be the name of the hometown. Replace 'gone' with the correct noun to specify the hometown.

× Man do which is capital city of Nepal an it is.

✓ It is the capital city of Nepal.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Simplify and restructure the sentence to clearly state that the hometown is the capital city of Nepal.

× The hometown where I lived is also known as Brown Encounter which is fully of his spiritual places and temples and culture mostly.

✓ The hometown where I live is also known as Brown Encounter, which is full of spiritual places, temples, and culture mostly.

Use 'live' instead of 'lived' to indicate current residence. 'Fully of his' is incorrect; it should be 'full of its'. Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list.

× There is never culture and never re society.

✓ There is rich culture and a strong society.

The original sentence is unclear and uses incorrect words. Replace 'never culture' and 'never re society' with appropriate phrases to convey the intended meaning.

× It gives.

✓ It gives a unique feeling.

The sentence 'It gives.' is incomplete and unclear. Add an object to complete the sentence meaningfully.

× There are a lot of things that I like about my hometown, but the most important thing that I like is the weather of my hometown because my hometown is.

✓ There are a lot of things that I like about my hometown, but the most important thing is the weather because my hometown is...

The sentence ends abruptly and is incomplete. Also, 'the most important thing that I like' can be simplified to 'the most important thing' for clarity.

× Near to the forest and is full of greenery and the scene and it's mostly top of the area and we can see the grid view an with a fresh air every time.

✓ It is near the forest and full of greenery and scenic views. It is mostly at the top of the area, and we can see the great view with fresh air every time.

Use 'near' without 'to' in this context. 'The scene' should be 'scenic views'. 'Grid view an' is unclear; likely 'great view'. Also, sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× It's been almost 24 years I've lived here as I was born and raised here an I'm fully attached with the environment and Society of my hometown and it's very.

✓ I've lived here for almost 24 years since I was born and raised here, and I'm fully attached to the environment and society of my hometown, which is very peaceful.

Use present perfect 'I've lived' with 'for' to indicate duration. 'Attached with' should be 'attached to'. The sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring.

× Peaceful. Do you stay here?

✓ It is peaceful. Do you stay here?

'Peaceful.' is a fragment; it needs a subject and verb to form a complete sentence.

× Yes, of course my hometown is very good place for the young people as it's not that much crowded as the city area Ann is full of.

✓ Yes, of course my hometown is a very good place for young people as it's not as crowded as the city area and is full of...

Add the article 'a' before 'very good place'. 'Not that much crowded' should be 'not as crowded'. 'Ann' is a typo for 'and'.

× Green, Arianne. Surrounding with the parks, everything and everyone in this my home town are so calm and helpful.

✓ Green areas surrounding the parks; everything and everyone in my hometown is so calm and helpful.

'Green, Arianne' is unclear; likely 'green areas'. 'Surrounding with' should be 'surrounded by' or 'surrounding'. Subject-verb agreement corrected: 'everyone is' not 'are'.