Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to provide a clear and accurate introduction of your hometown with correct names and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

예시: My hometown is Dehradun, located in India. It is the capital of Uttarakhand and is about 250 kilometers from New Delhi, the political capital. Dehradun is a beautiful city surrounded by mountains and hills, which makes us feel close to nature.

제안: Focus on organizing your ideas clearly with proper sentence structure. Use linking words like 'and' or 'also' to connect your points. Avoid repetition and try to be more specific about what you like, such as mentioning cleanliness, safety, and peacefulness separately.

예시: I like that my city is surrounded by mountains and hills, which keeps us close to nature. Also, it is neat and clean with little traffic, making it peaceful and safe for residents.

제안: Work on grammar and sentence clarity. Use correct verb tenses and complete sentences. Provide a clear timeline of your life in your hometown and avoid unclear phrases.

예시: I have lived in my hometown since childhood. I was born and raised there, completed my schooling, and attended university in the same city. I have spent most of my life there.

제안: Try to organize your answer with clear sentences and use linking words like 'especially' and 'also'. Be specific about activities available for young people and avoid grammatical errors.

예시: Yes, my hometown is great for young people. There are many opportunities to explore nature, especially the mountains and hills. Also, a river flows through the city, which is perfect for those interested in river rafting and other outdoor activities.

× It is 250 kilometer away from the political capital of India, New Delhi.

✓ It is 250 kilometres away from the political capital of India, New Delhi.

The noun 'kilometer' should be plural 'kilometres' because it refers to a distance greater than one. In English, units of measurement are pluralized when the quantity is more than one.

× The Dehradun is a beautiful city, is surrounded by the mountain and hill and we always feel near to the nature.

✓ Dehradun is a beautiful city, surrounded by mountains and hills, and we always feel close to nature.

The words 'mountain' and 'hill' should be plural ('mountains' and 'hills') because they refer to multiple geographical features. Also, 'near to the nature' is incorrect; 'close to nature' is the proper expression.

× The best thing about my city, as I say, it's surrounded by the mountain and hill, and the best thing about the cities that we always feel near to the nature city is neat and clean, no more normal traffic or not to know too much.

✓ The best thing about my city, as I say, is that it's surrounded by mountains and hills, and the best thing about the city is that we always feel close to nature. The city is neat and clean, with no heavy traffic or overcrowding.

'Mountain' and 'hill' should be plural ('mountains' and 'hills'). Also, 'cities' should be 'city' to maintain singular consistency. The phrase 'near to the nature' should be 'close to nature'. The sentence was also restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Crowded the peaceful city and safe and secure in the in India.

✓ It is a peaceful, safe, and secure city in India, not crowded.

The original sentence lacks proper structure and plural agreement. 'Crowded' should be used as an adjective describing the city, and the sentence needs to be rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I lived there since my childhood.

✓ I have lived there since my childhood.

The present perfect tense 'have lived' is appropriate here because the action started in the past and continues to the present. Using simple past 'lived' is incorrect in this context.

× I born there, I grew up there.

✓ I was born there, and I grew up there.

The verb 'born' requires the auxiliary verb 'was' to form the passive voice in the past tense. 'I born' is incorrect; it should be 'I was born'.

× After that I complete migration from the truck and university.

✓ After that, I completed my migration from the town to the university.

The verb 'complete' should be in the past tense 'completed' to match the past context. Also, 'migration from the truck and university' is unclear; it likely means moving from the town to the university, which is corrected for clarity.

× Which is located in there alone and I spent my whole life around the.

✓ Which is located there alone, and I have spent my whole life around it.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Spent' should be in present perfect 'have spent' to indicate an action continuing to the present. Also, 'around the' is incomplete; it should be 'around it' referring to the place.

× Yes, definitely there is so many thing for the young kids or young people who want to really want to explore the world specially the mountain and hill and there is some river is also flow between the city which is the person want to interested in the river rafting.

✓ Yes, definitely there are so many things for young kids or young people who really want to explore the world, especially the mountains and hills. There are also some rivers flowing through the city for people interested in river rafting.

'There is so many thing' should be 'there are so many things' to agree in number. 'Mountain and hill' should be plural 'mountains and hills'. 'Some river is also flow' should be 'some rivers flowing'. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× There is so many things for their.

✓ There are so many things for them.

'There is' should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'things'. 'Their' is a possessive pronoun and should be replaced with the object pronoun 'them'.