Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中有很多语法错误和表达不清晰的地方，导致听者难以理解。建议你使用简单明了的句子，直接说明家乡的位置，并补充具体的描述。

예시: My hometown is a beautiful city located in the southwestern part of China. It is famous for its fresh seafood and pleasant atmosphere, which attracts many visitors every year.

제안: 回答中表达有些混乱，建议先用主题句直接回答喜欢的方面，然后用连词连接具体细节，注意词汇的准确性和语法的正确性。

예시: I really like the food in my hometown because we have a variety of rice-based dishes, such as delicious rice noodles and sticky rice cakes. Moreover, the weather is usually sunny and warm, but not too dry, which makes it very comfortable.

제안: 回答内容较完整，但表达不够流畅，建议使用更自然的连接词和简洁的句子结构，使回答更连贯。

예시: I have lived in my hometown since I was born, except for four years when I went to Shanghai for college. I really enjoy living there because it feels familiar and comfortable to me.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议先明确回答问题，然后用具体原因支持观点，注意时态和单复数的正确使用。

예시: I enjoy living in my hometown, but I think it is not very good for young people because there are not many job opportunities. Therefore, many young people move to big cities to find better jobs and a better life.

× Well, my hometown is a lovely Costco Citi card title an IT which is located in the southwestern of China.

✓ Well, my hometown is a lovely city in the southwest of China.

句子结构混乱，出现了无意义的词语“Costco Citi card title an IT”，应简化为“a lovely city in the southwest of China”，使句子通顺且符合语法。

× Every year Mentor is come into title to enjoy the lovely seafood, fresh seafood and lovely atmosphere.

✓ Every year, many people come to my hometown to enjoy the lovely seafood and atmosphere.

主谓不一致，“Mentor is come”错误，应改为“many people come”，且“into title”无意义，改为“to my hometown”。

× Town I really like the food in my hometown because we may cover variety of rice based food like for example we have delicious rice noodles and sticky rice cakes.

✓ I really like the food in my hometown because we have a variety of rice-based foods, like delicious rice noodles and sticky rice cakes.

“Town”多余且错误；“cover variety”应为“have a variety”；“rice based food”应为复数“rice-based foods”。

× which is located in the southwestern of China.

✓ which is located in the southwest of China.

“southwestern”作为形容词时不加冠词，正确用法是“in the southwest of China”。

× which is sunny and then warm but not that draw.

✓ which is sunny and warm but not that dry.

“then”用错，应为“and”；“draw”拼写错误，应为“dry”。

× Apart from I I went to Shanghai for my college study, which is about four years.

✓ Apart from the time I went to Shanghai for my college studies, which was about four years,

句子结构混乱，“Apart from I I went”不正确，应改为“Apart from the time I went”；“college study”应为复数“college studies”。

× Apart from that, I live in my hometown and I really enjoy it because it makes me feel familiar and comfortable.

✓ Apart from that, I live in my hometown and I really enjoy it because it makes me feel familiar and comfortable.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× Was so I really enjoys living there, but I would say it's not that good for use because it's it didn't provide too many recruitment and jobs that many young people came to bustling cities to seek a better life and job.

✓ So I really enjoy living there, but I would say it's not that good for us because it doesn't provide many recruitment opportunities and jobs, so many young people come to bustling cities to seek a better life and job.

“Was so”错误，应为“So”；“enjoys”主语为“I”，应为“enjoy”；“for use”应为“for us”；“it's it didn't provide”时态混乱，应为“it doesn't provide”；“recruitment”需加“opportunities”使表达完整；“came”应为现在时“come”。