Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答信息量较大，但表达不够自然且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免冗长，注意冠词和单复数的使用。可以先直接回答问题，然后补充具体信息。

예시: My hometown is Misfortune, located in Guangdong Province, southern China. It is famous for its delicious cuisine and is known as the city of food lovers. Additionally, it is the birthplace of Kung Fu, and Bruce Lee is the most famous person from there.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，且部分句子无意义。建议用简洁明了的句子表达喜欢的具体方面，并使用连接词使内容连贯。

예시: I like my hometown because it has many famous brands and excellent facilities. Moreover, as I mentioned, it is a city of delicious food, so I enjoy trying various local dishes.

제안: 回答中时态和语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的时态，简洁表达居住时间和学习经历，避免无意义的词汇。

예시: I have lived in my hometown since I was born, so it has been over 20 years. However, when I was 18, I went to a nearby city to attend university, but I always come back home during holidays.

제안: 回答中有较多语法和表达错误，句子不连贯。建议先明确表达观点，再用具体理由支持，使用连接词使内容流畅。

예시: Yes, I think my hometown is a good place for young people to live. Compared to big cities like Guangzhou and Shenzhen, it is smaller but still offers entertainment and job opportunities. Besides, the cost of living is relatively low, which makes it affordable for young people.

× The most famous people in my hometown is Bruce Lee.

✓ The most famous person in my hometown is Bruce Lee.

这里的主语是单数形式“person”，谓语动词也应使用单数形式“is”，而不是复数形式“people”。主谓一致错误。

× Suggest a variety of well known brands and excellence facility available.

✓ There are a variety of well-known brands and excellent facilities available.

原句缺少主语和谓语，导致句子结构不完整。应补充完整的句子结构，使句子通顺。

× As I said before, it's a city of greasing heaven, so it's a response.

✓ As I said before, it's a city of food heaven, so it's a popular destination.

“greasing heaven”和“response”用词不当，表达不清晰。应使用正确的形容词和名词表达意思。

× I loving trying many different kinds of delicious food here.

✓ I love trying many different kinds of delicious food here.

“loving”用法错误，应该用一般现在时“love”表达习惯性动作。

× Actually I have been living here since I was born so it has been over 20 years now and however when I was 18 I need to pursue my studies so I need to attend a university is located in nearby city.

✓ Actually, I have been living here since I was born, so it has been over 20 years now. However, when I was 18, I needed to pursue my studies, so I attended a university located in a nearby city.

描述过去的动作时，应使用过去时态“needed”和“attended”，而不是现在时“need”和“attend”。

× But I always came back to the D CT2.

✓ But I always came back to the D CT2.

此句中“came back”使用过去时，若表达习惯性动作应改为一般现在时“come back”，但根据上下文，过去时也可接受。

× Yes, I quiet to sync my hometown is a good place for young people to leave 'cause compared to some big cities like Guangzhou and Shenzhen in China for China is smaller than.

✓ Yes, I quite think my hometown is a good place for young people to live because compared to some big cities like Guangzhou and Shenzhen in China, it is smaller.

“quiet to sync”拼写错误，应为“quite think”；“leave”应为“live”；句子结构混乱，需调整语序和用词。

× That spot is still offers some of entertainments and the job opportunities.

✓ That spot still offers some entertainment and job opportunities.

“is still offers”动词重复，应去掉“is”；“some of entertainments”用法错误，应为“some entertainment”。

× Besides, the cost is relatively low, making it accessible for young people to enjoy their.

✓ Besides, the cost is relatively low, making it accessible for young people to enjoy their lives.

句子末尾缺少宾语“lives”，导致表达不完整。