Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ваш ответ содержит несколько коротких предложений, которые не связаны между собой логически. Следует объединять предложения и использовать связующие слова для плавности речи. Также стоит избегать общих фраз и добавить более конкретные детали о вашем городе.

예시: My hometown is a small city located in the central part of Russia. It is special because it has wonderful people and beautiful natural surroundings, which make it a peaceful and pleasant place to live.

제안: Ответ не структурирован и содержит грамматические ошибки, что затрудняет понимание. Рекомендуется строить предложения более грамотно, использовать связующие слова и конкретизировать, что именно вам нравится в людях вашего города.

예시: What I like most about my hometown is the friendly people. I spent a lot of time with my best friends from primary school and our kind neighbors, who made my childhood very pleasant.

제안: Ответ состоит из коротких предложений, которые можно объединить для лучшей связности. Также есть повтор слова и небольшие ошибки. Следует использовать связующие слова и избегать повторов.

예시: I lived in my hometown until I was 17, after which I went to university in Saint Petersburg. Those years were very fulfilling, and I always remember them with warmth and fondness.

제안: Ответ не очень ясен из-за неуместных сокращений и ошибок. Следует избегать непонятных аббревиатур, использовать правильную грамматику и более подробно объяснять свои мысли с помощью связующих слов.

예시: I believe one disadvantage of my hometown is the lack of opportunities for young people. Many young people have to move to big cities like Moscow, Kazan, or Saint Petersburg to find better prospects.

× I was born in the small city. In the central part of Russia.

✓ I was born in a small city in the central part of Russia.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper connection. Combining them into one sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× My hometown is different from other places because it has such a great people and nature.

✓ My hometown is different from other places because it has such great people and nature.

The word 'people' is plural and does not require 'a' or 'such a'. Removing 'a' corrects the quantifier usage.

× My favorite thing? About my hometown is people. Who I was with, spending time with.

✓ My favorite thing about my hometown is the people I spent time with.

The original sentences are fragmented and awkward. Combining them into a single, clear sentence corrects the structure.

× Especially in my best friends from primary school and it was also our neighbors who were very kind from you when I was child a child.

✓ Especially my best friends from primary school and our neighbors, who were very kind to me when I was a child.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun usage ('from you') and awkward phrasing. Correcting pronouns and restructuring improves clarity.

× I lived in my hometown. Until I was 17.

✓ I lived in my hometown until I was 17.

Separating the sentence creates a fragment. Combining into one sentence with correct past tense usage is appropriate.

× After that I had to go to university in Saint Petersburg.

✓ After that, I had to go to university at Saint Petersburg.

The preposition 'at' is more appropriate when referring to attending a university, though 'in' is also commonly used; adding a comma after 'After that' improves readability.

× All those years were very fulfilling and I always recall those those times with kind and warm warness.

✓ All those years were very fulfilling, and I always recall those times with kind and warm feelings.

The word 'warness' is incorrect; 'warm feelings' or 'warmth' is appropriate. Also, removing the repeated word 'those' and adding a comma improves clarity.

× I think this is the first disadvantage of places like my hometown.

✓ I think this is the main disadvantage of places like my hometown.

'First disadvantage' is awkward; 'main disadvantage' is more natural. No plural issue here, but improving word choice enhances clarity.

× There is no perspective for young generation.

✓ There is no perspective for the young generation.

Adding the definite article 'the' before 'young generation' is necessary to specify the group.

× A lot of youngster had to go to big city centres like Moscow, Kazan or Saint Petersburg.

✓ A lot of youngsters have to go to big city centres like Moscow, Kazan, or Saint Petersburg.

'Youngster' should be plural 'youngsters' to match 'a lot of'. Also, present tense 'have to' fits better for general statements.