Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: まず質問に直接答えた後、簡潔に職業と勤務地を述べましょう。現在の回答は繰り返しや文法ミス、時間の情報が不明瞭です。例：職業（graphic designer）→勤務先（Osaka Technology）→通勤時間の順に簡潔に述べ、文法（現在進行形の誤用、前置詞）を直してください。また、5文以内に収め、余分な語を省くこと。

예시: I'm a graphic designer who works at Osaka Technology. I work at the Osaka office, and my commute takes about 14 minutes by train and walking.

제안: 場所の説明は明確に。現在の回答は語順が不自然で同じ語の繰り返しがあります。まず職場名と位置（district or area）を言い、その後通勤時間や手段を述べると良いです。短く明瞭な文を使い、繰り返しを避けてください。

예시: I work at Osaka Technology, which is in the western part of Osaka. It takes me about 14 minutes to get there by train and a short walk.

제안: 質問に対して理由を1〜2文で付け加えましょう。現在は断片的で曖昧な表現（'I worked in building and'）や繰り返しがあります。『Yes, because...』の形で、職場が良い理由（立地、設備、人間関係など）を具体的に述べ、時間や距離の数値は一つに絞ってください。

예시: Yes, it's a good place to work because the office is modern and only a five-minute walk from the station, which makes my commute very convenient.

제안: この質問は好みを尋ねています。肯定する場合は理由と具体例を1〜2文で述べてください。現在は文が途切れ、情報が不明瞭です（'The two and park'は意味不明）。公園や施設が近いなど、具体的な利点（休憩、設備）を明確に伝えてください。

예시: Yes, I like it very much. I enjoy it because there is a small park nearby where I can relax during breaks, and the office has good facilities like a bright lounge and modern computers.

제안: 将来の計画は明確に、具体的な目標と方法を述べましょう。現在は文が途切れ（'user. Interfaces'）で分かりにくいです。例えば『スキル向上の分野（branding, UI design）』と『どのように学ぶか（courses, projects）』を述べると良いです。

예시: I plan to improve my graphic design skills by specializing in branding and user interface design. I hope to take advanced courses and work on branding projects to gain more experience.

× Yes I do. I'm working now and I'm working as a graphic designer. ACT at Osaka Technology it takes 4 minutes for my home.

✓ Yes, I am. I am currently working as a graphic designer at Osaka Technology. It takes four minutes from my home.

The original contains run-on sentences and unclear fragments. Combine and reorder clauses for clarity: 'I'm working now and I'm working as a graphic designer' is repetitive; use 'I am currently working as a graphic designer'. 'ACT at Osaka Technology it takes 4 minutes for my home' is ungrammatical; place the workplace phrase with the job and state travel time separately. Use 'from my home' not 'for my home'. Also spell out numbers under ten in spoken formal answers and include commas for clarity.

× It's technology in Osaka Technology located West in Osaka. IT It takes 14 minutes from my home by train and walking.

✓ My workplace is Osaka Technology, which is located in the western part of Osaka. It takes fourteen minutes from my home by train and walking.

Original has repeated words and incorrect word order. Use a clear subject 'My workplace' or 'Osaka Technology' and a relative clause 'which is located in the western part of Osaka'. 'IT It' is a duplication. Use 'by train and walking' or better 'including walking' after 'by train' for clarity. Consistent tense and correct word order are needed.

× Yes it is. I worked in building and. It's it's near the station, it takes 4-5 or six minutes and.

✓ Yes, it is. I work in a building nearby. It's near the station and it takes four to six minutes to walk there.

Original mixes past 'I worked' with present context; use present 'I work' since speaking about the current workplace. 'I worked in building and.' is an incomplete fragment. Remove repetitions 'It's it's'. Use 'four to six minutes' instead of '4-5 or six minutes and.' and finish the sentence. Maintain consistent tense and complete sentence structure.

× Yes, I would. It's my favorite space because. The two and park near my workplace. I enjoyed facility near the works.

✓ Yes, I would. It's my favorite place because there is a park near my workplace. I enjoy the facilities near my workplace.

Original has fragmented sentences and incorrect pronoun/lexical choices: 'space' should be 'place', 'The two and park' is nonsensical—likely meant 'there is a park'. 'I enjoyed' uses past tense incorrectly; use present 'I enjoy' for current preferences. 'works' should be 'workplace'. Use complete sentences and correct prepositions.

× I want to level up my graphic design skills and I want to. I want to do branding and user. Interfaces.

✓ I want to level up my graphic design skills, and I want to do branding and user interface design.

Original is fragmented with sentence breaks in the wrong places: 'I want to.' dangling. Combine related ideas into one sentence and correct 'user. Interfaces' to 'user interface design'. Keep parallel structure when listing goals.