Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and correct minor grammar (use "at the university" and avoid redundant phrasing). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding a reason.

예시: I finished school last year and now work as an administrative officer at the university. I enjoy it because the role lets me stay involved with campus life and support student activities.

제안: Be precise and natural: correct prepositions and reduce repetition. Use one or two sentences with a clear topic sentence and a specific detail (mention the campus name or a distinctive feature). Use linking words like "and" or "also" to join ideas smoothly.

예시: I work at a university in Clearwater Bay, Cyclone, which overlooks the sea. The campus is surrounded by both coastline and hills, so the views are spectacular.

제안: Fix grammar and word choice ("sea view", "pleasant to work in"). Make the structure clear: state opinion, then give two concise reasons using linking words like "first" and "second". Avoid filler words and keep sentences short.

예시: Yes, it is a great place to work. First, the sea view and campus environment make it pleasant to be at work. Second, colleagues and students are friendly, which makes teamwork easy.

제안: Avoid repetition of ideas from the previous question; give a fresh specific detail or example (e.g., a regular event or facility). Correct small errors ("it it" → "it", "get on with" is fine but keep concise). Use two sentences: opinion + supporting example.

예시: Yes, I do like my workplace. The campus atmosphere is calm and there are pleasant facilities like a seaside park, and colleagues are cooperative so projects run smoothly.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: say "I am currently on a two-year contract" and avoid informal phrasing like "put through further study." Provide a clear plan with linking words (first, then) and one specific detail about the intended study. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I am currently on a two-year contract, so I plan to complete it first. After that, I want to pursue further studies in teaching, which is my long-term goal, so I am preparing for the teaching qualification test.

× I finished school last year and currently I'm working as an officer in your university.

✓ I finished school last year and am currently working as an officer at your university.

Use 'am currently working' rather than 'currently I'm working' for more natural word order; more importantly use the preposition 'at' for working at an institution rather than 'in'. The error is primarily tense/aspect presentation and preposition choice; reorder auxiliary and adverb for natural present continuous and use 'at'.

× As I just said, I work in a university which is located in the Clearwater Bay in Cyclone.

✓ As I just said, I work at a university located in Clearwater Bay in Cyclone.

Use 'at a university' to refer to employment location and omit 'the' before place names like 'Clearwater Bay' unless it is part of the official name. Remove extra 'in'. This corrects preposition usage and article use.

× The university has really gorgeous sea view.

✓ The university has a really gorgeous sea view.

Add the article 'a' before the singular noun phrase 'sea view'. Also 'really' correctly modifies 'gorgeous'. This fixes missing article (article error) and adjective usage.

× It is surrounded by seas and mountains.

✓ It is surrounded by the sea and the mountains.

When referring to specific surrounding features, use definite article 'the'. 'Seas' is unusual here; singular 'sea' or 'the sea' is natural. This fixes preposition/ article usage.

× First, it has the gorgeous Seaview and makes people very pleasant while working in here.

✓ First, it has a gorgeous sea view and makes people feel very pleasant while working here.

'Sea view' should be two words and use lowercase. 'Makes people feel very pleasant' corrects verb phrase; 'feel' is needed. Remove 'in' from 'working here' because 'here' already indicates place. This fixes adverb/phrase placement and verb usage.

× Second, the colleagues and students are generally very kind and easy to get along.

✓ Second, the colleagues and students are generally very kind and easy to get along with.

'Get along' is a phrasal verb that requires the particle 'with' when describing relationships with people. This corrects missing particle in adjective phrase.

× Yes, I like the place I work.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work.

Add 'where' to introduce a relative clause describing the place. Omitting 'where' is understandable but less natural; this fixes relative pronoun use.

× First it it has a very pleasant and comforting environment.

✓ First, it has a very pleasant and comforting environment.

Remove the duplicated word 'it' and add a comma after 'First'. The duplication is an error in sentence structure/typing.

× Second, the people like staff and students are very easy to get on with, so the collaboration is smooth.

✓ Second, the people, like the staff and students, are very easy to get on with, so collaboration is smooth.

Use commas to set off the example 'like the staff and students' and add 'the' before 'staff'. 'Get on with' is correct; remove the article before 'collaboration' unless specific. This fixes punctuation and article usage.

× Currently I'm under A2 year contract.

✓ Currently I'm under a two-year A2 contract.

Use 'a two-year A2 contract' to express duration correctly. 'A2 year' is ungrammatical; include article 'a' and hyphenated compound 'two-year'. This corrects tense/aspect and quantifier phrasing.

× After that I would like to put through further study in teaching which is always a dream for me.

✓ After that I would like to pursue further studies in teaching, which has always been a dream for me.

Use 'pursue' for studying further, plural 'studies' is natural, and add commas around the relative clause. 'Has always been' gives correct tense for ongoing dream. 'Put through' is incorrect here. This fixes verb choice and noun form.

× That's also the reason why I'm taking the LS test.

✓ That's also the reason I'm taking the LS test.

'Reason why' is redundant; prefer 'the reason I'm taking'. This improves pronoun/clause usage for naturalness.