Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ должен быть более естественным и структурированным. Используйте связки и избегайте повторений. Например, начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте детали, используя связки.

예시: I'm a student. Every day, I study and complete various tasks. I am currently learning English and history, which I find very interesting.

제안: Ответ должен быть более грамматически правильным и логичным. Объясните причину, используя связки, и избегайте ошибок в структуре предложения.

예시: I don't work because I am under 18 years old. Instead, I focus on studying, reading books, and learning languages.

제안: Ответ должен быть более связным и естественным. Используйте связки для объяснения ситуации и избегайте повторов.

예시: I'm not sure if it's a good place to work because I study at home in the kitchen. I don't have my own room, so the kitchen is the only place where I can study.

제안: Ответ должен быть более чётким и связным. Используйте связки для объяснения причин и избегайте тавтологии.

예시: No, I wouldn't like to study in the kitchen because I get distracted by food and other things, so it's hard to concentrate.

제안: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и понятным. Используйте связки, чтобы логично изложить свои планы и избегайте неясных выражений.

예시: In the future, I would like to work in a place surrounded by mountains and lakes with fresh air. I also plan to improve my English skills and focus on my career development.

× I'm a student, I everyday study, I do tasks, I learned English language, I learn history.

✓ I'm a student. I study every day, I do tasks, I learn English language, I learn history.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'Learned' should be 'learn' to maintain present tense consistency. Also, 'everyday' is an adjective; the correct adverb is 'every day'.

× No, I don't work because I don't have year 18. I'm just study and read books, learn languages.

✓ No, I don't work because I am not 18 years old. I just study, read books, and learn languages.

The phrase 'I don't have year 18' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I am not 18 years old'. Also, 'I'm just study' is incorrect; it should be 'I just study'.

× I don't know. I'm just study at the home in the kitchen. I don't have my room and I just study at the kitchen.

✓ I don't know. I just study at home in the kitchen. I don't have my own room, so I just study in the kitchen.

'I'm just study' is incorrect; it should be 'I just study'. 'At the home' should be 'at home'. Also, 'at the kitchen' should be 'in the kitchen'.

× No, because if I study in the kitchen I just think about foods and everything and I can't study with this place.

✓ No, because if I study in the kitchen, I just think about food and everything, and I can't study in this place.

'Foods' is usually uncountable in this context, so 'food' is correct. 'Can't study with this place' is incorrect; it should be 'can't study in this place'.

× I think I work with mountains and lakes, uh, fresh air and think about the good and I improve my English skills or everything and just think about my works.

✓ I think I will work near mountains and lakes, with fresh air, think about good things, improve my English skills, and focus on my work.

The sentence mixes present and future tenses incorrectly. 'I think I work' should be 'I think I will work' to express future plans. Also, 'think about the good' is vague; 'think about good things' is clearer. 'My works' should be 'my work'.