Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is informative but could be more concise and clearer. Avoid redundancy like 'well known and very prestigious' which mean similar things. Also, 'third year visa firm' is unclear and seems like a mistake. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and keep it within 5 sentences.

예시: I work full time as a law clerk at a prestigious law firm on Bay Street in Toronto. I have been there for three years. My main duties include communicating with clients, preparing documents, and conducting legal research.

제안: Your answer repeats the question and contains unclear phrases like 'Val established world law firm'. Try to avoid repeating the question and use clear, natural expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I work full time at a well-established law firm in Toronto that specializes in personal injury cases. I enjoy working there because my colleagues create a positive and supportive environment every day.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. For example, instead of 'support all of my ideas and career growth', say 'support my ideas and professional development'.

예시: I think it's an excellent place to work, especially for young professionals, because the firm is very supportive. Moreover, the management is friendly and encourages my ideas and professional development.

제안: Your answer is generally good but contains some hesitation ('Umm') and an incomplete sentence ('a lot of opportunities for'). Try to avoid filler words and complete your thoughts clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I really like Toronto. It's one of my favorite cities and has become my second home since I moved here. Because it's a busy city with many opportunities, it's a perfect place for a young professional like me to work and live.

제안: Your answer is clear and well-structured. To improve, you could use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly and add a bit more detail about how you plan to achieve your goal.

예시: My future work plan is to become a senior law clerk. I want to stay with the same firm because of its supportive environment. Therefore, I work hard every day to improve my skills and gain more professional experience.

× I actually work full time as a law clerk in the well known and very prestigious law firm on Bay St. in Toronto.

✓ I actually work full-time as a law clerk in the well-known and very prestigious law firm on Bay St. in Toronto.

The phrase 'full time' should be hyphenated to 'full-time' when used as an adjective before a noun. Similarly, 'well known' should be hyphenated to 'well-known' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. This improves clarity and follows standard English grammar rules.

× It's my third year visa firm and my main responsibilities include communication with clients, document preparation and research.

✓ It's my third year at the firm and my main responsibilities include communication with clients, document preparation, and research.

The phrase 'third year visa firm' is unclear and likely incorrect. The intended meaning seems to be 'third year at the firm.' Also, a comma is needed after 'document preparation' in a list of three or more items to separate the elements clearly (Oxford comma).

× Where do you work? I work full time in a Val established world law firm in Toronto which is known for its excellent reputation in personal injury and I enjoy working there because of the people who make every day better.

✓ I work full-time in a well-established world law firm in Toronto, which is known for its excellent reputation in personal injury, and I enjoy working there because of the people who make every day better.

The phrase 'Val established world law firm' is incorrect; it should be 'well-established world law firm.' Also, 'full time' should be hyphenated to 'full-time.' Commas are added to separate clauses for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× I think it's an excellent place to work, especially for young professionals because my firm is very supportive and the management is really friendly and support all of my ideas and career growth.

✓ I think it's an excellent place to work, especially for young professionals because my firm is very supportive and the management is really friendly and supports all of my ideas and career growth.

The subject 'management' is singular and requires the verb 'supports' in the third person singular form to agree in number. Using 'support' is incorrect here.

× Yes, I really like Toronto. It's one of my favorite cities and since I moved here, it's become my second home. Umm, it's a very busy city with a lot of opportunities for. So for someone like me, a young professional, it's a perfect place to work and live.

✓ Yes, I really like Toronto. It's one of my favorite cities and since I moved here, it's become my second home. Umm, it's a very busy city with a lot of opportunities. So, for someone like me, a young professional, it's a perfect place to work and live.

The phrase 'a lot of opportunities for' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'a lot of opportunities.' Also, adding a comma after 'So' improves sentence flow and clarity.

× My future work plan is to become a senior law clerk. I actually would like to stay with the same firm because of its supportive environment, so I work really hard every day to become more professional and better at what I do.

✓ My future work plan is to become a senior law clerk. I actually would like to stay with the same firm because of its supportive environment, so I work really hard every day to become more professional and better at what I do.

No modal verb error detected in this sentence; it is grammatically correct as is.