Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words to make it coherent. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to explain your favourite subject with more precise vocabulary.

예시: I am a student currently studying in grade 12, specialising in commerce. My favourite subject is economics because it explains scarcity and economic problems that people face daily. This subject has helped me understand how markets work and the challenges in resource allocation.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be improved by adding a linking phrase and a bit more detail to make it sound natural and complete.

예시: No, I do not work at the moment because I am a student focusing on my studies to prepare for my future career.

제안: Your answer is unclear and somewhat rude. Instead, politely explain that you have not worked yet because you are still studying. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I have not worked yet because I am still a student, and I want to focus on my education before starting a job.

제안: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using better sentence structure and linking words. Be more specific about why you prefer working at home and how it helps you.

예시: Although I am not working yet, if I get a job, I would prefer to work from home, especially in my room. It is a peaceful environment that helps me stay motivated and focused on my tasks.

제안: Your answer needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. Start with a direct statement of your plans, then explain why and how you will achieve them using linking words.

예시: In the future, I plan to become a businesswoman because I believe it offers great opportunities. To succeed, I know I must work hard, stay motivated, and seize every chance for promotion and growth.

× My favorite my stream is commerce and my favorite subject is economic.

✓ My favorite stream is commerce and my favorite subject is economics.

The word 'economic' is an adjective, but here the noun 'economics' is needed to refer to the subject. Also, the phrase 'My favorite my stream' is redundant; 'My favorite stream' is correct.

× It all about the scarcities and problem of economic and some features of economic that people usually do and face the problems and it helped me a lot to explore the.

✓ It is all about the scarcities and problems of economics and some features of economics that people usually face, and it has helped me a lot to explore them.

The sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'problem' should be plural 'problems' to match 'scarcities'; 'economic' should be 'economics' as a noun. Also, the sentence structure is corrected for clarity and verb agreement.

× No, I didn't work yet because I'm a child and I'm studying with how many times I should tell you.

✓ No, I haven't worked yet because I'm a child and I'm studying; how many times should I tell you?

The present perfect tense 'haven't worked' is appropriate for an action not done yet. The modal verb 'should' is used correctly in the question form. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× My future work plans to become a businesswoman and it's a very best opportunity to me is me to become a businesswoman.

✓ My future work plan is to become a businesswoman, and it is a very good opportunity for me to do so.

The pronoun usage is incorrect and redundant. 'Plans' should be singular 'plan' to match the sentence. 'Very best' is corrected to 'very good' for natural usage. The sentence is rephrased for clarity.

× And I know some points to become a businesswoman. It really helped me first that promotion, motivation, hard work and opportunity.

✓ And I know some points to become a businesswoman. They really help me, such as promotion, motivation, hard work, and opportunity.

The sentence uses 'helped' incorrectly in past tense; present tense 'help' fits better here. Also, 'that' is replaced with 'such as' to list examples properly. The sentence is restructured for clarity.