Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is good but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I am currently a student at the University of Dhaka, majoring in Tourism and Hospitality Management because I love traveling. Therefore, I hope to work in the hospitality industry in the near future.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be more natural by avoiding phrases like 'as I mentioned before' which are unnecessary here. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer flow better.

예시: I am not working at the moment because I am a student. However, I plan to work in the hospitality industry soon since I enjoy meeting and communicating with new people.

제안: Your answer has good content but some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing reduce clarity. Try to use correct verb forms and linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because my colleagues are very helpful. Since I joined as a new intern, they have been friendly and always help me deal with difficulties.

제안: Your answer contains useful details but has grammar errors and awkward expressions. Use correct verb forms and clearer phrases. Also, avoid repetition and use linking words for better flow.

예시: Yes, I like my workplace because my colleagues and supervisor are very supportive and friendly. They always guide me on how to complete different tasks. Moreover, the environment is pleasant and the green surroundings make it even better.

제안: Avoid repeating 'as I mentioned before' and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to be more concise and use correct prepositions.

예시: I plan to continue my career in the hospitality industry. Currently, I am doing an internship at the Intercontinental Hotel, and after finishing it, I will join a five-star hotel.

× I am a student studying at University of Dhaka majoring in Tourism and Hospitality Management.

✓ I am a student studying at the University of Dhaka majoring in Tourism and Hospitality Management.

The phrase 'University of Dhaka' requires the definite article 'the' before it because it is a specific institution. This is an article error (ID 22) but closely related to singular/plural usage in proper nouns.

× I choose this subject because I love traveling and it is my favorite hobby and I would love to join in the hospitality industry in near future.

✓ I chose this subject because I love traveling and it is my favorite hobby and I would love to join the hospitality industry in the near future.

The verb 'choose' should be in past tense 'chose' to match the context of a past decision. Also, 'join in' should be 'join' without 'in'. 'In near future' needs the article 'the' before 'near future'. These are past tense issue (ID 5), incorrect preposition use (ID 11), and article error (ID 22).

× As I mentioned before, right now I am not working.

✓ As I mentioned before, right now I am not working.

No correction needed here; sentence is grammatically correct.

× I have planned to work in near future in the hospitality industry as I love to meet and communicate with new people.

✓ I have planned to work in the near future in the hospitality industry as I love to meet and communicate with new people.

The phrase 'in near future' requires the definite article 'the' before 'near future'. This is an article error (ID 22).

× Yeah, it is very convenient for me to work because all my colleagues are very helpful as I joined here as a new intern.

✓ Yeah, it is very convenient for me to work because all my colleagues are very helpful since I joined here as a new intern.

The conjunction 'as' is incorrectly used to indicate time; 'since' is more appropriate here. This is an incorrect conjunction use (ID 16).

× So they are very friendly to me and always helps me how to deal with difficulties.

✓ So they are very friendly to me and always help me with how to deal with difficulties.

The verb 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with the plural subject 'they'. Also, 'helps me how to deal' is incorrect; it should be 'help me with how to deal'. This is a subject-verb agreement error (ID 27) and sentence structure error (ID 26).

× Yes, I love the place where I work because all my colleagues are very supportive, even my supervisor, he is very friendly and he always guide me how to solve different task.

✓ Yes, I love the place where I work because all my colleagues are very supportive, even my supervisor; he is very friendly and he always guides me on how to solve different tasks.

The verb 'guide' should be 'guides' to agree with singular subject 'he'. Also, 'how to solve different task' should be 'how to solve different tasks'. This is a subject-verb agreement error (ID 27) and singular/plural issue (ID 1).

× Not only that, the environment of my workplace is very suitable for me and the green atmosphere is very very like.

✓ Not only that, the environment of my workplace is very suitable for me and the green atmosphere is very, very nice.

The phrase 'very very like' is incorrect; 'like' is a verb, not an adjective. The correct adjective is 'nice'. Also, a comma is needed between repeated 'very'. This is incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (ID 13).

× As I mentioned you before, I believe I will continue my career in hospitality industry and for this purpose right now I am doing my internship at Intercontinental Hotel and after finishing my internship then I will join in a five star hotel.

✓ As I mentioned to you before, I believe I will continue my career in the hospitality industry and for this purpose, right now I am doing my internship at the Intercontinental Hotel and after finishing my internship, I will join a five-star hotel.

The phrase 'mentioned you' should be 'mentioned to you' (preposition use). 'Hospitality industry' needs 'the' before it (article error). 'Intercontinental Hotel' needs 'the' (article error). 'Join in' should be 'join' (preposition error). 'Five star' should be hyphenated as 'five-star' (adjective order). These are incorrect preposition use (ID 11), article errors (ID 22), and incorrect order of adjectives (ID 18).