Work— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Do you work or are you a student?
수험생
I'm currently a fourth year student, a pharmacy student at university, but I'm also an intern in a hospital.
시험관
Where do you work?>
수험생
I currently do not work, but as I've said, I'm an intern at the hospital, at the King Hussein Hospital. There we take care of cancer patients.
시험관
Is it a good place to work?
수험생
It is a perfect place to work for. They give us hands on, great experience, yet it is very tiring. You barely get to say it, but at the same time you're doing something that helps other people. So it's not it's not something to regret, it is something to enjoy.
시험관
Would you like the place where you work?
수험생
I do in fact like where I work. The place is a very rich is very rich and information and knowledge from the cases that you see that you would never see anywhere else. The the staff that works there that are very helpful and very knowledgeable. So I do in fact love it.
시험관
What are your future work plans?
수험생
I am still in a debate whether I wanna continue in the hospital field, in clinical pharmacy field or whether I will go towards a more of an academic route. But I'm leaning toward the academic phases of teaching at universities etcetera.
평가
총점
Part 1
Do you work or are you a student?
점수: 85.0제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy by combining related information smoothly. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.
예시: I'm currently a fourth-year pharmacy student at university and also an intern at a hospital, which gives me practical experience alongside my studies.
Where do you work?
점수: 80.0제안: Avoid repeating information already mentioned and try to provide more specific details about your role. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.
예시: Although I don't have a formal job, I am an intern at King Hussein Hospital, where I assist in caring for cancer patients, gaining valuable hands-on experience.
Is it a good place to work?
점수: 75.0제안: Try to organize your ideas more clearly and avoid hesitations or repeated phrases. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific examples.
예시: It is an excellent place to work because it offers hands-on experience, although it can be tiring. However, knowing that I am helping others makes the effort worthwhile and enjoyable.
Would you like the place where you work?
점수: 70.0제안: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific details about what you like.
예시: I really like working there because the hospital offers a wealth of knowledge from unique cases, and the staff are very helpful and knowledgeable, which creates a great learning environment.
What are your future work plans?
점수: 80.0제안: Try to use more formal language and avoid informal phrases like 'wanna'. Also, organize your ideas clearly and use linking words to show contrast and preference.
예시: I am currently debating whether to continue in clinical pharmacy at the hospital or pursue an academic career, but I am leaning towards teaching at universities because I enjoy sharing knowledge.
문법
× It is a perfect place to work for.
✓ It is a perfect place to work.
The preposition 'for' is unnecessary after 'a perfect place to work'. The phrase 'a place to work' is complete without 'for'. Removing 'for' makes the sentence grammatically correct and natural.
× The place is a very rich is very rich and information and knowledge from the cases that you see that you would never see anywhere else.
✓ The place is very rich in information and knowledge from the cases that you see that you would never see anywhere else.
The original sentence has repetition ('is a very rich is very rich') and lacks the preposition 'in' after 'rich'. The correct phrase is 'rich in information and knowledge'. Removing repetition and adding 'in' corrects the sentence.
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