Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: आपके उत्तर में कुछ वाक्य संरचना और व्याकरण की गलतियाँ हैं, जैसे 'a web applications' की जगह 'web applications' या 'a web application' होना चाहिए। साथ ही, उत्तर थोड़ा असंगत और दोहरावपूर्ण है। आपको अपने उत्तर को सरल, स्पष्ट और संक्षिप्त रखना चाहिए।

예시: I am currently working as a software developer, mainly focusing on building and designing web applications. Additionally, I am preparing for my ALS exams to pursue further studies abroad.

제안: आपके उत्तर में वाक्य दोहराव और व्याकरण की गलतियाँ हैं, जैसे 'quite and welcome' की जगह 'quiet and welcoming' होना चाहिए। इसके अलावा, वाक्य थोड़े अस्पष्ट हैं। आपको अपने उत्तर को स्पष्ट और सटीक बनाना चाहिए, और वाक्यों को जोड़ने के लिए उपयुक्त लिंकिंग शब्दों का उपयोग करना चाहिए।

예시: I work in a mid-sized company located in the suburbs. It has a quiet and welcoming environment with all the amenities I need, making it a comfortable place to work.

제안: आपके उत्तर में दोहराव और अनावश्यक शब्द हैं, जैसे 'and and' और 'plus' का बार-बार उपयोग। आपको अपने उत्तर को संक्षिप्त और प्रभावी बनाना चाहिए, और लिंकिंग शब्दों का सही उपयोग करना चाहिए।

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because it offers many amenities and a welcoming atmosphere. Moreover, my colleagues are very supportive and friendly.

제안: आपके उत्तर में व्याकरण की गलतियाँ हैं, जैसे 'the surroundings is' की जगह 'the surroundings are' होना चाहिए। साथ ही, 'same views' का अर्थ स्पष्ट नहीं है। आपको अपने उत्तर को स्पष्ट और सही व्याकरण के साथ देना चाहिए।

예시: Yes, I really enjoy working there because the surroundings are beautiful and the views are heartwarming. Additionally, my team members are always helpful and cooperative.

제안: आपके उत्तर में व्याकरण की गलती है, जैसे 'I haven't had decided yet' की जगह 'I haven't decided yet' होना चाहिए। साथ ही, उत्तर को थोड़ा और विस्तार से देना चाहिए।

예시: I haven't decided my exact plans yet, but I definitely want to pursue further studies abroad and aim to become a data analyst in the future.

× Or are you a student? I am employed as a software developer.

✓ I am employed as a software developer.

The phrase 'Or are you a student?' is a repetition of the examiner's question and is unnecessary in the student's response. Removing it improves sentence clarity and structure.

× I mainly focus on building and designing a web applications alongside my work.

✓ I mainly focus on building and designing web applications alongside my work.

The phrase 'a web applications' incorrectly combines the singular article 'a' with the plural noun 'applications'. Removing 'a' corrects the singular/plural agreement.

× My workplace is located in the suburbs area which makes it a lively place and has all the amenities which I required.

✓ My workplace is located in the suburban area which makes it a lively place and has all the amenities which I require.

The correct prepositional phrase is 'in the suburban area' not 'in the suburbs area'. Also, 'required' should be present tense 'require' to match the context.

× I work in a mid sized company which is quite and welcome which has quite and welcoming environment.

✓ I work in a midsized company which is quite welcoming and has a welcoming environment.

The phrase 'quite and welcome' is incorrect; it should be 'quite welcoming'. Also, 'midsized' is one word. The sentence structure is improved by reordering and correcting adjectives.

× Yes, it is a good place to work because it has many amenities and and the atmosphere is also very welcoming.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because it has many amenities and the atmosphere is also very welcoming.

The phrase 'and and' is a typographical error; one 'and' should be removed for correct conjunction usage.

× Plus the work team and plus the colleagues are also welcoming.

✓ Plus, the work team and the colleagues are also welcoming.

The repeated use of 'plus' is redundant. Using 'Plus,' once at the beginning is sufficient and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I really enjoy working at that place because the surroundings is very beautiful and the same views are also heart warming.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy working at that place because the surroundings are very beautiful and the same views are also heartwarming.

The noun 'surroundings' is plural and should be paired with the plural verb 'are'. Also, 'heart warming' should be one word 'heartwarming'.

× Plus I also appreciate my team members which are which are always helpful and cooperative.

✓ Plus, I also appreciate my team members who are always helpful and cooperative.

The relative pronoun 'which' is used for things, while 'who' is used for people. Since 'team members' are people, 'who' is correct.

× I haven't had decided yet, but I'll definitely pursue further studies abroad and become a data analyst in the future.

✓ I haven't decided yet, but I'll definitely pursue further studies abroad and become a data analyst in the future.

The phrase 'haven't had decided' is incorrect. The present perfect 'haven't decided' is the correct form to express an action not yet completed.