Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to correct grammar mistakes and use more precise vocabulary. For example, say "Studying full-time allows me" instead of "allow me" and "extracurricular activities" instead of "extra circular activity". Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

예시: I'm currently a full-time student studying Civil Engineering at university. This allows me to focus on gaining the necessary knowledge and skills for my future career. Additionally, I participate in various extracurricular activities to enhance my experience.

제안: Improve grammar and vocabulary accuracy. For example, say "I'm still a student at university" and "campus is very diverse with many talented students". Also, try to link your ideas smoothly and avoid repetition.

예시: I don't work currently because I'm still a student at university. My university is one of the highest ranked in Africa, known for its excellent academic programs. Moreover, the campus is very diverse, with many talented students from different countries.

제안: Clarify your ideas and correct vocabulary and grammar errors. For example, "good place to take my bacteria use" is unclear; perhaps you meant "good place to gain experience". Also, correct "photograph" to "photography" and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: Although I don't work there, I believe the university is a good place to gain experience because the environment is creative and inspiring. I enjoy spending time there as it has helped me improve my photography and study skills.

제안: Focus on clear and correct sentences. Avoid filler words and repetition. For example, say "I like the place where I study because I have many friends and my classmates help me with my studies."

예시: I like the place where I study since I have many friends there, and my classmates often help me with my studies.

제안: Use correct grammar and clearer expressions. For example, say "I'm planning to pursue my master's degree by obtaining a scholarship after achieving high scores. Also, I look forward to working in a company."

예시: I plan to pursue my master's degree by getting a scholarship after achieving high scores. After that, I look forward to working in a reputable company.

× Studying full time allow me to focus on gaining the knowledge and skills needed for my future career.

✓ Studying full time allows me to focus on gaining the knowledge and skills needed for my future career.

The verb 'allow' should be in the third person singular form 'allows' to agree with the singular subject 'Studying full time'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue involving verb + -ing form.

× Additionally, being a student gives me opportunities to participate in various academic extra circular activity.

✓ Additionally, being a student gives me opportunities to participate in various academic extracurricular activities.

The noun 'activity' should be plural 'activities' to match 'various', which implies more than one. Also, 'extra circular' is a misspelling; the correct term is 'extracurricular'.

× I'm currently a student pursuing my degree in Civil Engineering at university.

✓ I'm currently a student pursuing my degree in Civil Engineering at the university.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'university' when referring to a specific institution.

× It's one of the highest ranked universities in Africa, known for excellent academic program.

✓ It's one of the highest ranked universities in Africa, known for excellent academic programs.

The noun 'program' should be plural 'programs' to match the plural subject 'universities' and the context of multiple academic offerings.

× In addition, the camps is very diverse with many talent students from different countries studying there.

✓ In addition, the campus is very diverse with many talented students from different countries studying there.

The word 'camps' is incorrect; the correct singular noun is 'campus'. Also, 'talent' should be the adjective 'talented' to describe 'students'.

× Actually, I don't work at the moment because I'm still student at university.

✓ Actually, I don't work at the moment because I'm still a student at the university.

The indefinite article 'a' is needed before 'student'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'university' when referring to a specific institution.

× It's one of the highest ranked universities in Africa, known for excellent academic program.

✓ It's one of the highest ranked universities in Africa, known for an excellent academic program.

The indefinite article 'an' is needed before 'excellent academic program' when referring to a singular countable noun.

× the camps is very diverse with many talent students from different countries studying there.

✓ the campus is very diverse with many talented students from different countries studying there.

'Camps' is incorrect; the singular noun 'campus' is appropriate. 'Talent' should be the adjective 'talented' to describe 'students'.

× However, I think it's a good place to take my bacteria use because the in the environment is very creative and inspiring.

✓ However, I think it's a good place to take my bachelor's degree because the environment is very creative and inspiring.

The phrase 'take my bacteria use' is incorrect and unclear. It likely intends 'take my bachelor's degree'. Also, 'the in the environment' is incorrect; it should be 'the environment'.

× I enjoy spending time there because it's helped me to improve my photograph, my studying skills.

✓ I enjoy spending time there because it has helped me to improve my photography and my study skills.

'Photograph' should be the noun 'photography'. 'Studying skills' is better expressed as 'study skills'. Also, 'it's helped' is better as 'it has helped' for clarity.

× Actually, I like my pleasure where I study, not work 'cause I'm still a student.

✓ Actually, I like the place where I study, not work because I'm still a student.

'My pleasure' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'the place'. Also, 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech.

× Also they, they, my my colleague helped me study.

✓ Also, my colleagues help me study.

The sentence has repeated words and incorrect singular 'colleague' instead of plural 'colleagues'. Also, 'helped' should be present tense 'help' to match ongoing action.

× I'm looking for get my master approach by getting scholarship after I get highlights score and also I'm looking forward to working in the company.

✓ I'm looking to get my master's degree by getting a scholarship after I get high scores, and I'm also looking forward to working in a company.

'Looking for get' is incorrect; it should be 'looking to get'. 'Master approach' should be 'master's degree'. 'Getting scholarship' needs an article 'a scholarship'. 'Highlights score' should be 'high scores'. 'The company' should be 'a company' unless a specific company is known.