Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer provides good information but is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and using simpler sentence structures. Also, avoid unnecessary details that do not directly answer the question.

예시: I am currently working as a senior technical administrator at a public health organization based in the USA. I have been in this role since I finished my studies in 2012, focusing on public health initiatives in Bangladesh.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete at the end. Try to complete your thoughts fully and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid repeating words like 'currently' and improve sentence flow for naturalness.

예시: I work for a nonprofit public health organization based in the USA. I have a hybrid work schedule, splitting my time between the office and working from home, which gives me greater flexibility.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, avoid repeating similar adjectives and try to provide a specific example or reason to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, I think it's a great place to work because my colleagues from different countries, including Bangladesh, often share positive feedback. The environment is enjoyable and motivating, which helps me stay productive.

제안: Your answer has many hesitations and some unclear phrases like 'get product.' Try to speak more fluently and clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words. Also, clarify your points with specific reasons or examples.

예시: I really like my current workplace because it offers flexibility and motivates me to be productive. Additionally, I hope to find more opportunities for growth here in the future.

제안: Your answer is clear but contains some grammatical errors and hesitations. Try to speak more confidently and use correct prepositions and word forms. Also, explain your plans with more specific details and linking words.

예시: My future work plan is to stay motivated and focused in my current job to increase my productivity. In the long term, I want to pursue a PhD in public health so I can contribute innovative solutions to the field.

× Since then I have been working in a public Health Organization and serving to the public health of Bangladesh in different capacity.

✓ Since then I have been working in a public Health Organization and serving the public health of Bangladesh in different capacities.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used after 'serving'. The correct phrase is 'serving the public health'. Also, 'capacity' should be plural as it refers to multiple roles or functions.

× And this organization is currently based in the USA and I have been working as senior technical administrator.

✓ And this organization is currently based in the USA and I have been working as a senior technical administrator.

The article 'a' is missing before the job title 'senior technical administrator'. Job titles used as singular countable nouns require an article.

× Well currently I'm working in a non profit public Health Organization which is based in the USA and I'm currently working in a hybrid nature both from physical office as well as work from home.

✓ Well currently I'm working in a nonprofit public Health Organization which is based in the USA and I'm currently working in a hybrid manner both from the physical office as well as working from home.

The phrase 'working in a hybrid nature' is incorrect; 'hybrid manner' is appropriate. Also, 'work from home' should be 'working from home' to maintain parallel verb forms. Additionally, 'physical office' should be preceded by 'the'.

× So it allows me to really more flexibly and more.

✓ So it allows me to be more flexible and more productive.

The phrase 'really more flexibly and more' is awkward and incorrect. 'More flexible' is the correct comparative adjective form, and 'productive' completes the intended meaning. Also, 'flexibly' is an adverb, but here an adjective is needed after 'be'.

× most of the colleagues from around the world as well as from Bangladesh has a good feedback on our workplace

✓ most of the colleagues from around the world as well as from Bangladesh have good feedback on our workplace

The subject 'most of the colleagues' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' instead of 'has'. Also, 'feedback' is uncountable and does not take 'a'.

× I'm very much, uh, fond of my current workplace, uh, because it allows me to, uh, be flexible, to, uh, be motivated and to, uh, get product.

✓ I'm very fond of my current workplace because it allows me to be flexible, to be motivated, and to be productive.

The phrase 'get product' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'productive'. Also, unnecessary filler words 'uh' are removed for clarity.

× So in that aspects, I prefer my workplace and I hope, uh, this workplace will give me more opportunities to grow.

✓ So in that aspect, I prefer my workplace and I hope this workplace will give me more opportunities to grow.

The phrase 'in that aspects' is incorrect; the singular 'aspect' should be used. Also, filler 'uh' is removed for clarity.

× Considering my current job, my future work plan is very specific.

✓ Considering my current job, my future work plans are very specific.

'Work plan' should be plural 'work plans' to match the context of multiple plans. Also, plural verb 'are' is needed.

× And in the future, I would like to pursue my PhD to public in public health so that I can bring more innovative issues.

✓ And in the future, I would like to pursue my PhD in public health so that I can bring more innovative ideas.

The phrase 'pursue my PhD to public in public health' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'in' for the field of study. Also, 'issues' should be 'ideas' to convey positive contributions.