Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer provides relevant information but is somewhat repetitive and slightly unclear. Try to make your response more concise and structured by stating your current role clearly and then briefly mentioning your experience. Avoid repeating the same information.

예시: I have been working in the public health sector in Bangladesh since 2012, primarily with a nonprofit organization where I serve in various capacities.

제안: Your answer is informative but could be improved by organizing your ideas more clearly and using linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more precise in your descriptions.

예시: I work for a public health organization based in the US that operates globally. In Bangladesh, they have a physical office, and my work is a hybrid of on-site and remote tasks.

제안: Your answer is positive but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to avoid filler words and organize your thoughts logically using linking words. Provide specific reasons why you find it a good place to work.

예시: I find it a great place to work because the environment is welcoming and motivating. Additionally, colleagues worldwide, including those in Bangladesh, appreciate the organization's supportive culture.

제안: Your answer starts well but ends abruptly and is incomplete. Make sure to finish your thoughts and provide a balanced view by mentioning both positives and negatives clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Overall, I like my workplace because it offers flexible hybrid work options. However, sometimes communication can be challenging when working remotely.

제안: Your answer conveys your goals but includes many filler words and some unclear phrases. Try to speak more fluently and clearly, and organize your answer by stating your immediate goal and then your long-term plan with reasons.

예시: My immediate goal is to stay motivated and organized in my current work. In the future, I plan to pursue a PhD in public health to contribute innovative research and initiatives to the field.

× So since 2012 I've been working for nonprofit organization and serving the public sector in different capacity.

✓ So since 2012 I've been working for a nonprofit organization and serving the public sector in different capacities.

The noun 'nonprofit organization' is countable and singular, so it requires the article 'a'. Also, 'capacity' should be plural 'capacities' to indicate various roles or functions served over time.

× Well, I work in a public Health Organization which is basically based in the US However, there are some operations in countries around the world, but in Bangladesh, they have a physical office.

✓ Well, I work for a public health organization which is basically based in the US. However, there are some operations in countries around the world, and in Bangladesh, they have a physical office.

The correct preposition to indicate employment is 'for' rather than 'in'. Also, 'Health' should not be capitalized unless part of a proper noun. The sentence was run-on and needed punctuation and conjunction correction for clarity.

× And I used to work in blended nature, like, uh, physical work and work from home.

✓ And I used to work in a blended manner, like, uh, physical work and work from home.

The phrase 'blended nature' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'blended manner' to describe the mixed mode of working.

× As far as, uh, I'm concerned, it's a really good place to work with and it is always welcoming and motivating.

✓ As far as, uh, I'm concerned, it's a really good place to work, and it is always welcoming and motivating.

The phrase 'a good place to work with' is incorrect; the preposition 'with' is unnecessary here. The correct phrase is 'a good place to work'.

× So most of the colleagues around the world, as well as in Bangladesh, they appreciate the nature of work and the environment, the organization, of course.

✓ So most of the colleagues around the world, as well as in Bangladesh, appreciate the nature of work and the environment of the organization, of course.

The pronoun 'they' is redundant because 'most of the colleagues' is already the subject. Removing 'they' improves sentence clarity and correctness.

× So it's really in general.

✓ So, in general, it's really good.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. Rearranging the sentence to 'So, in general, it's really good.' provides clarity and correct sentence structure.

× In general, I do like the place where I currently work, but there are some downsides as well.

✓ In general, I do like the place where I currently work, but there are some downsides as well.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× First of all, I would like to mention the positive sides because it allows us flexibility to work from home as well as in office.

✓ First of all, I would like to mention the positive sides because it allows us flexibility to work from home as well as in the office.

The phrase 'in office' is missing the definite article 'the'. The correct phrase is 'in the office'.

× So the necessary sort of hybrid but.

✓ So, it's a necessary sort of hybrid work arrangement.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning and improves sentence structure.

× Well, first of all, I would like to be, uh, motivated and well organized in my art, uh, what I currently, uh, I'm doing.

✓ Well, first of all, I would like to be, uh, motivated and well organized in my work, uh, what I am currently, uh, doing.

The word 'art' is incorrect in this context; 'work' is appropriate. Also, 'what I currently, uh, I'm doing' is awkward; 'what I am currently doing' is clearer.