Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应更直接地回应问题，避免不必要的赘述，并保持语言自然流畅。可以简洁说明当前身份，并补充具体细节。

예시: I recently quit my job and now I am a full-time student. I spend most of my days studying in the library from morning until night, which I find very fulfilling.

제안: 回答应直接回应问题，避免重复和语法错误。可以清楚说明过去的工作和当前的状态。

예시: I used to work at a local company, but I quit last month. Currently, I stay at home to take care of my baby and focus on my studies.

제안: 回答应更流畅，避免语法错误，使用连接词使表达更连贯，并具体说明原因。

예시: My last workplace was not very good because the employer was not very friendly to workers. For example, important decisions were often made without informing our department in advance.

제안: 回答应更简洁，避免重复和语法错误，使用连接词使描述更连贯，具体描绘环境。

예시: I liked my previous workplace because it had a big window overlooking a playground where many children played under two large trees and a field full of plants. It was especially beautiful in the summer.

제안: 回答应更自然流畅，避免重复，清晰表达未来计划并提供具体细节。

예시: I plan to work as a health assistant at Sherwin Gray. Currently, I am preparing the required hours and qualifications to start working there soon.

× It's hard to say I work now or I'm a student because nowadays I just quit my job and study in the library.

✓ It's hard to say whether I work now or I'm a student because nowadays I have just quit my job and study in the library.

这里的时间状语“nowadays”表示现在的状态，动作“quit”应使用现在完成时“have just quit”，表示动作刚刚发生，强调与现在的关联。

× I'm pretty happy you can have time in the library, Angela.

✓ I'm pretty happy that you can have time in the library, Angela.

这里缺少连接词“that”引导宾语从句，正确表达应为“I’m pretty happy that you can have time in the library”。

× As I said before, I didn't work from last month so I don't have a job now.

✓ As I said before, I haven't worked since last month so I don't have a job now.

“from last month”应改为“since last month”，且表示从过去持续到现在的动作，动词应使用现在完成时“haven't worked”。

× Nowadays I just stay at home, company my baby and focus on my study.

✓ Nowadays I just stay at home, accompany my baby and focus on my study.

“company”是名词，动词应使用“accompany”，表示陪伴。

× Actually I was.

✓ Actually, I was.

句子缺少后续内容，且逗号用于分隔插入语，使句子更完整和自然。

× My last job is not a good place to work because the employer is not a worker friendly and some regulations there is not clearly.

✓ My last job was not a good place to work because the employer was not worker-friendly and some regulations there were not clear.

“worker friendly”应连写为复合形容词“worker-friendly”，且时态应与过去时间一致，动词“is”改为“was”，“is”改为“were”，“clearly”应为形容词“clear”。

× some regulations there is not clearly.

✓ some regulations there are not clear.

主语“regulations”为复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”，形容词“clear”修饰“regulations”。

× For example, usually if our department has some decisions, they didn't tell us before we before we.

✓ For example, usually if our department has some decisions, they don't tell us beforehand.

句子重复“before we before we”，且表达不完整，改为“don't tell us beforehand”更简洁准确。

× I like the place, uh, I worked before 'cause we have a big window so you can sew through the window can see many kids.

✓ I like the place I worked at before because we had a big window so you could see many kids through the window.

描述过去的工作地点，时态应为过去时，“have”改为“had”，“can”改为“could”，且“sew”应为“see”。

× They, they were playing in the playground in two big tree, two big trees and even a field full of plants.

✓ They were playing in the playground with two big trees and even a field full of plants.

“in two big tree”表达不当，应使用“with two big trees”表示陪伴的环境。

× That's very beautiful when summer.

✓ That's very beautiful in summer.

时间状语应使用介词“in”加季节名词，表达“在夏天”。

× I plan to work as a health assistant in Sherwin Gray 'cause nowadays I'm preparing my hours, I'm I'm preparing for working in this place.

✓ I plan to work as a health assistant in Sherwin Gray because nowadays I'm preparing my hours; I'm preparing to work in this place.

“preparing for working”表达不自然，改为“preparing to work”更符合英语习惯。

× I plan to work as a health assistant in Sherwin Gray 'cause nowadays I'm preparing my hours, I'm I'm preparing for working in this place.

✓ I plan to work as a health assistant in Sherwin Gray because nowadays I'm preparing my hours; I'm preparing to work in this place.

“'cause”是口语缩写，正式场合应使用“because”，且句子中重复“I'm”应删除多余部分。