Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy like "I tend to edit" and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to limit your answer to about 3-4 sentences for better effectiveness.

예시: I work as a freelancer creating YouTube videos, mainly talking head content. Occasionally, I also edit films, especially cinematic short movies when the opportunity arises.

제안: Your answer is clear and provides relevant details, but it could be improved by using linking words to connect your current and past work more smoothly. Also, avoid filler words like "basically" to sound more natural.

예시: I currently work from home as a freelancer. However, I previously worked as the head video editor at a company called MEP Insight.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons. Also, avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like "sometimes I tend to do often roles."

예시: Yes, it was a great place to work because the environment was supportive and I had opportunities to take on various responsibilities beyond my role as a video editor.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains awkward phrasing. Try to express your feelings clearly and support them with specific reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I really liked my previous workplace because it encouraged my creativity and helped me develop a better approach to my work.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more fluent and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition of "trying to." Also, be more specific about your plans.

예시: In the future, I plan to start my own company and initially hire a few employees to help grow the business.

× I worked from morning to evenings and there was a video editor head, but sometimes I tend to do often roles.

✓ I worked from morning to evening and there was a head video editor, but sometimes I tended to do other roles.

The phrase 'from morning to evenings' is incorrect because 'evenings' is plural and inconsistent with 'morning'. The correct phrase is 'from morning to evening' to indicate the time span. Also, 'video editor head' is an incorrect word order; the correct term is 'head video editor'. Additionally, 'I tend to do often roles' is awkward and ungrammatical; it should be 'I tended to do other roles' to match past tense and correct word choice.

× Yes, I like the place where I have worked previously.

✓ Yes, I liked the place where I worked previously.

The question is about a past place of work, so the past tense 'liked' and 'worked' should be used instead of present perfect 'have worked'. This maintains tense consistency and clarity.

× It made me more creative and more like it made me feel give me better approach to my work.

✓ It made me more creative and made me feel like I had a better approach to my work.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. The phrase 'more like it made me feel give me better approach' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning by restructuring it to 'made me feel like I had a better approach', which is grammatically correct and clear.

× For my future work plans, I'm trying to open up my own company then I'm trying to employ few people for a start then.

✓ For my future work plans, I want to open my own company and then employ a few people to start with.

The phrase 'I'm trying to' is awkward for future plans; 'I want to' or 'I plan to' is more appropriate. Also, 'employ few people' is incorrect; it should be 'employ a few people' because 'few' without 'a' has a negative meaning. The sentence is also restructured for clarity and natural flow.