Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề, sau đó cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sắp xếp câu hợp lý hơn để câu trả lời mạch lạc. Ví dụ, bạn nên nói rõ bạn làm nghề gì, ở đâu, và trách nhiệm chính của bạn là gì.

예시: I have been working as a doctor at Central Hospital, one of the most well-known hospitals in Vietnam, for about five years. My main responsibility is diagnosing and treating patients.

제안: Bạn nên trả lời câu hỏi một cách trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, sử dụng câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ có liên kết logic. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như 'Noise' hay 'enthusiasm stuff'.

예시: I work at Great Central Hospital, which is one of the most well-known hospitals in Vietnam. I enjoy working there because of the experienced and enthusiastic staff.

제안: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời tự nhiên, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp. Câu trả lời nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng và các chi tiết hỗ trợ được liên kết mạch lạc. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói về môi trường làm việc thân thiện và trang thiết bị hiện đại.

예시: I believe my hospital is an excellent place to work because it offers a friendly environment for staff and is equipped with modern facilities and experienced experts.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể như bạn đã làm.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy working at my hospital because it offers many opportunities to gain experience and improve my skills. For example, I can exchange knowledge with international experts.

제안: Câu trả lời chưa hoàn chỉnh và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và hoàn thành ý tưởng. Nên sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cụ thể hơn về kế hoạch tương lai.

예시: In the future, I plan to participate in more team projects and conduct research at my hospital to improve the quality of patient care. Additionally, I intend to enroll in advanced training courses to enhance my skills.

× Recently I have worked in as a doctor in where Central hospital for around five years is now.

✓ Recently I have been working as a doctor at Central Hospital for around five years.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'have worked in as' and 'where Central hospital for around five years is now' which is ungrammatical. The present perfect continuous tense 'have been working' is appropriate to express an action continuing up to now. Also, 'at Central Hospital' is the correct preposition and word order.

× As most well known hospital in Vietnam.

✓ It is the most well-known hospital in Vietnam.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'It is' completes the sentence. Also, 'most well known' should be hyphenated as 'most well-known' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× My responsibility is pronouncing and treating for patient.

✓ My responsibility is diagnosing and treating patients.

The verb 'pronouncing' is incorrect here; 'diagnosing' fits better. Also, 'treating for patient' is incorrect; it should be 'treating patients' without 'for'. The plural 'patients' is appropriate as the doctor treats multiple patients.

× I'm working at Great Central Hospital with the Noise, one of the most well known hospital in Vietnam because of the rich experience as well as the enthusiasm stuff in there I love working in.

✓ I'm working at Great Central Hospital in Hanoi, one of the most well-known hospitals in Vietnam because of the rich experience as well as the enthusiastic staff there. I love working there.

'with the Noise' is likely a typo for 'in Hanoi'. 'Hospital' should be plural 'hospitals' to agree with 'one of the'. 'Enthusiasm stuff' is incorrect; it should be 'enthusiastic staff'. The sentence was run-on and needed to be split for clarity.

× Personally, I firmly believe that my hospital is the an excellent place to work because it provides the friendly environment for the staff and equip and equip with the modern facility and experience the expert.

✓ Personally, I firmly believe that my hospital is an excellent place to work because it provides a friendly environment for the staff and is equipped with modern facilities and experienced experts.

'the an excellent' is incorrect; only one article is needed: 'an excellent'. 'the friendly environment' should be 'a friendly environment' as it is general. 'equip and equip with' is incorrect; it should be 'is equipped with'. 'facility' should be plural 'facilities'. 'experience the expert' is incorrect; it should be 'experienced experts'.

× Yes, I really love working in my hospital because it offers a a many of opportunity for me to gain the experience and improve my skill.

✓ Yes, I really love working in my hospital because it offers many opportunities for me to gain experience and improve my skills.

'a a many of opportunity' is incorrect; it should be 'many opportunities'. 'the experience' should be 'experience' without 'the' as it is uncountable here. 'my skill' should be plural 'my skills'.

× For example, I have more opportunity to exchange the knowledge with the international experts.

✓ For example, I have more opportunities to exchange knowledge with international experts.

'more opportunity' should be plural 'more opportunities'. 'the knowledge' should be 'knowledge' without 'the' as it is uncountable. 'the international experts' can be 'international experts' without 'the' for general reference.

× In the future, I guess I I guess I take part in more team project and conduct research in my hospital to enhance the quality of patient care service.

✓ In the future, I guess I will take part in more team projects and conduct research in my hospital to enhance the quality of patient care services.

The sentence repeats 'I guess' unnecessarily. 'take part' requires future tense 'will take part' to express future plans. 'team project' should be plural 'team projects'. 'patient care service' should be plural 'patient care services'.