Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid redundancy. For example, you can combine your ideas into fewer sentences and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: I am currently working as a pharmacist in a 24/7 pharmacy in Tehran, where I am gaining professional experience after completing my degree a few years ago.

제안: Your answer is good but could be improved by using clearer linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, try to avoid repeating similar ideas.

예시: I work at a busy pharmacy located in the city center. Although managing prescriptions and counseling patients can be tiring, I enjoy helping people improve their health.

제안: Your answer is clear and detailed. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking phrases to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I wouldn't say it's an ideal place to work mainly because of the night shifts, which disrupt my sleep. Moreover, the heavy workload and repetitive tasks can be challenging, especially since I am passionate about research.

제안: Avoid repeating words like 'well' and try to make your sentences more concise. Use linking words to express contrast clearly.

예시: My feelings about my workplace are mixed; although the environment is busy and stressful, I find motivation in helping people improve their health.

제안: Good answer with clear goals. To improve, try to avoid starting sentences with 'well' and use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly.

예시: Currently, I am saving money to achieve financial stability for pursuing a PhD abroad. Additionally, I am gaining experience in laboratory research centers, which I find exciting.

× I really enjoy helping people to have a better health condition.

✓ I really enjoy helping people have better health conditions.

The verb 'help' is usually followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Also, 'health condition' is more natural in plural when speaking generally about people's health.

× Well, I'd say no, mostly because of my work schedule.

✓ Well, I'd say no, mostly because of my work schedule.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I work at night shifts, so it can really disturb my sleeping routine.

✓ I work night shifts, so it can really disturb my sleeping routine.

The preposition 'at' is not used with 'night shifts'. The correct phrase is 'work night shifts' without 'at'.

× Well, despite the bustling environment and the stressing workflow, I really enjoy helping people directly to have better health conditions and that is what motivates me towards keeping going.

✓ Well, despite the bustling environment and the stressful workflow, I really enjoy helping people directly have better health conditions, and that is what motivates me to keep going.

The adjective 'stressing' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'stressful'. Also, 'helping people directly to have' should be 'helping people directly have' (omit 'to'). 'Motivates me towards keeping going' should be 'motivates me to keep going' for natural expression.