Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Следует избегать ошибок в выражениях, например, "9 old months baby" лучше заменить на "my 9-month-old baby". Также стоит сделать ответ более связным и логичным.

예시: I am currently on maternity leave as I have a 9-month-old baby, but I plan to return to work as a teacher soon.

제안: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткую структуру. Следует использовать связные предложения и правильные времена, например, "My school is situated near my house" и "I used to go to work by my own car".

예시: I used to work at a school near my house, and I usually drove there in my own car.

제안: Ответ содержит повторения и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать более точные фразы и связки, например, "because it is close to my house, so my commute is short, which saves me time."

예시: It's the best place for me to work because it's close to my house, so my commute is short and I can save time.

제안: Ответ неполный и содержит грамматические ошибки. Нужно завершить мысль и использовать связные предложения, например, "I like my workplace because it is located in the center of town, surrounded by many shops and cafes."

예시: Yes, I like my workplace because it is located in the center of my town, surrounded by many shops and cafes.

제안: Ответ понятен, но содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать правильные времена и более точные формулировки, например, "I want to continue my studies and pursue a master's degree. After graduating, I would like to teach at a university."

예시: I want to continue my studies and pursue a master's degree. After graduating, I would like to teach students at a university.

× Currently I am on maternity leave with my 9 old months baby and I will use it to work as a teacher.

✓ Currently I am on maternity leave with my 9-month-old baby and I will use this time to work as a teacher.

The phrase '9 old months baby' is incorrect. The correct form is '9-month-old baby' which is a compound adjective describing the baby. Also, 'use it' is vague; 'use this time' is clearer and more appropriate.

× I used to work at school. My school situated near my house. I go. I went to my work with my own car.

✓ I used to work at a school. My school is situated near my house. I went to work by my own car.

The sentence 'My school situated near my house' lacks a verb; it should be 'My school is situated near my house.' 'I go.' is incomplete and unclear in this context and can be omitted or clarified. 'I went to my work with my own car' is better as 'I went to work by my own car.' Also, 'at school' should be 'at a school' to specify.

× Well, it's the best place to work for me because it it is near to my house, it is not a long time to go to work and I spare time instead I.

✓ Well, it's the best place to work for me because it is near my house, it does not take long to go to work, and I have spare time.

The phrase 'near to my house' should be 'near my house' as 'near' does not require 'to'. 'It is not a long time to go to work' is awkward; better is 'it does not take long to go to work.' 'I spare time instead I' is unclear and incorrect; 'I have spare time' is appropriate.

× Of course, I would like the place where I work because it is this place situated in the center of my town. Around these places, there are a lot of.

✓ Of course, I like the place where I work because it is situated in the center of my town. Around this place, there are a lot of things.

The phrase 'it is this place situated' is incorrect; 'it is situated' suffices. 'Around these places' should be 'Around this place' to match singular. The sentence ends abruptly; adding 'there are a lot of things' completes the thought.

× So I wanted to continue my studies about master degree and after graduating master degree I would like to teach students at the university.

✓ So I want to continue my studies for a master's degree and after graduating with a master's degree, I would like to teach students at the university.

'I wanted' suggests past tense but the context is about future plans, so 'I want' is correct. 'Studies about master degree' should be 'studies for a master's degree.' 'After graduating master degree' should be 'after graduating with a master's degree.'