Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で明確ですが、「third grade」という表現は日本の高校の学年を表すには不自然です。より自然な表現にするために、"I'm a third-year student at Chijonal High School." のように言い換えると良いでしょう。

예시: I'm a third-year student at Chijonal High School.

제안: 質問に対して「働いている場所」を尋ねられているのに、「学校に通っている」と答えているため、質問の意図に合っていません。また、"I I"の繰り返しや文法の誤りもあります。質問の意図を理解し、正確に答える練習が必要です。

예시: I'm a student, so I don't work yet. I attend Shijo Nawate High School, where I learn many subjects.

제안: 質問は「働く場所として良いか」を尋ねていますが、回答は「勉強する場所」としての良さに焦点が当たっています。質問の意図に合わせて答えを調整し、具体的な理由を述べると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, it's a good place to work because the environment is quiet and there are many facilities that support students' learning.

제안: 回答に文法の誤り（"a little convenience store"や"unconvenient"）があり、意味が伝わりにくいです。より自然な表現と正しい単語を使い、理由を明確に述べることが必要です。

예시: Yes, I like my school, but it would be better if there were more convenience stores nearby because currently, it's inconvenient for students and teachers.

제안: 文法の誤り（"work company"や"might so exciting"）が多く、意味が不明瞭です。より正確な文法と語彙を使い、理由を具体的に述べる練習が必要です。

예시: I want to work for a company in a foreign country because I think it would be exciting and interesting to experience a different culture.

× I I go to high school at Shijo Nawate.

✓ I go to high school at Shijo Nawate.

The sentence contains a repeated subject 'I I' which is a sentence structure error. Removing the duplicate 'I' corrects the sentence.

× It is great school because I can learn a lot of things.

✓ It is a great school because I can learn a lot of things.

The noun 'school' is countable and singular, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× Yes, I love the school place, but there is a little convenience store so it is a it is unconvenient for many students and teachers.

✓ Yes, I love the school, but there is a small convenience store, so it is inconvenient for many students and teachers.

The phrase 'school place' is unnatural; 'the school' is more appropriate. Also, 'a little convenience store' is correct but 'small convenience store' is more natural. The word 'unconvenient' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'inconvenient'. The sentence also had repetition 'it is a it is' which was removed.

× I want to work company in the foreign country because it might so exciting and interesting for me.

✓ I want to work for a company in a foreign country because it might be so exciting and interesting for me.

The verb 'work' requires the preposition 'for' when referring to a company. Also, 'company' is a countable noun and needs an article 'a'. 'The foreign country' is too specific; 'a foreign country' is more appropriate here. The sentence also missed the verb 'be' after 'might'. The corrected sentence includes these changes.

× Yeah, that's my dream to work foreign country.

✓ Yeah, that's my dream to work in a foreign country.

The phrase 'work foreign country' is missing the preposition 'in' and the article 'a' before 'foreign country'. Adding these corrects the sentence structure.