Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is informative but a bit long and slightly unnatural. Try to make your response more concise and natural by breaking it into two sentences and avoiding redundancy. Also, use the correct term 'legal professional' instead of 'legal profession'.

예시: I am currently working as a legal professional with seven years of experience. My job involves reviewing, drafting, and negotiating master service agreements, which I find very fulfilling.

제안: There are grammatical errors and awkward phrases in your answer. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, try to connect your ideas smoothly using linking words.

예시: I work at Cognizant India, which is located in Mumbai. However, I don't have to work late at night because we have a work-from-home setup, and the environment is very collaborative and supportive.

제안: Your answer is generally good but has minor errors and could be more natural. Avoid unnecessary words like 'indeed' and correct small mistakes such as 'the there is'. Use linking words properly to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because my teammates are very collaborative and supportive. Moreover, there are opportunities to upskill every month.

제안: Your answer contains inappropriate word choices like 'insane' and 'inane' which have negative meanings. Also, the sentence is confusing. Use positive and clear vocabulary to describe your colleagues and processes. Keep your answer concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, I like my workplace because the processes are straightforward, and the study materials I receive are helpful. Also, my colleagues are knowledgeable and hardworking.

제안: Your answer has good content but some awkward phrasing and grammar mistakes. Use correct expressions like 'climb the corporate ladder' and 'upskill myself'. Also, improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: My future work plans include climbing the corporate ladder by continuously upskilling myself. I hope to become the Vice President of Legal at one of my favourite organisations, such as Google.

× I'm currently working as a legal profession with seven years of experience, and my work involves reviewing, drafting, and negotiating certain master service agreements for the organization, and I think my job is fulfilling.

✓ I'm currently working as a legal professional with seven years of experience, and my work involves reviewing, drafting, and negotiating certain master service agreements for the organization, and I think my job is fulfilling.

The word 'profession' is a noun meaning a type of job or career, but here an adjective is needed to describe the person. The correct adjective form is 'professional'. Using 'legal profession' incorrectly describes the person as a job rather than a professional individual.

× I working Cognizant India located in Mumbai.

✓ I am working at Cognizant India located in Mumbai.

The sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' needed for the present continuous tense 'I am working'. Also, the preposition 'at' is required before the company name to indicate place of work.

× However, I don't bind the midnight oil because the work setup is working from home and it is collaborative and supportive.

✓ However, I don't burn the midnight oil because the work setup is working from home and it is collaborative and supportive.

The correct idiom is 'burn the midnight oil', meaning to work late into the night. 'Bind the midnight oil' is incorrect. Also, 'working from home' is correct here as a description of the work setup.

× Moreover, the there is a chance to upskill yourself each and every month.

✓ Moreover, there is a chance to upskill yourself each and every month.

The phrase 'the there is' is incorrect. The correct form is simply 'there is' to indicate existence or availability of something.

× Yes, I like the place where I work because there is no rigmarole in the processes and in the study materials that I'm receiving and there is insane and inane people who complete their work with a lot of knowledge.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because there is no rigmarole in the processes and in the study materials that I'm receiving and there are sensible and intelligent people who complete their work with a lot of knowledge.

The words 'insane' and 'inane' are inappropriate here as they mean 'crazy' and 'silly' respectively, which contradicts the intended positive meaning. The correct adjectives should be 'sensible' and 'intelligent' to describe knowledgeable people.

× My future work plans include stepping up the corporate ladder each time I upscale myself and I hope to end up with being a Vice President legal in one of my favorite organization which is Google.

✓ My future work plans include stepping up the corporate ladder each time I upskill myself and I hope to end up being a Vice President Legal in one of my favorite organizations, which is Google.

The verb 'upscale' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'upskill', meaning to improve skills. Also, 'end up with being' is awkward; 'end up being' is correct. 'Organization' should be plural 'organizations' as it refers generally. Capitalization of 'Legal' as a title is appropriate here.