Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more direct and clear by starting with a simple statement about your status, then add brief supporting details. Avoid uncertain phrases like 'I guess' and redundant words like 'apparently'.

예시: I am currently a student at Sina School in Denha, where I am improving my Dutch language skills.

제안: Make your answer more natural by using correct grammar and clearer expressions. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repetition.

예시: I work at a small supermarket in town, where I help customers complete their shopping and guide them by explaining details about the products.

제안: Avoid repeating similar ideas and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' or 'as' to explain reasons clearly and provide specific benefits.

예시: Yes, it is a great place to work because it helps me improve my communication skills and learn about different aspects of the job.

제안: Make your answer more concise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and express your feelings clearly with specific reasons.

예시: Yes, I enjoy working there because it helps me organize my life and earn a salary, which improves my financial situation.

제안: Try to speak more clearly and complete your sentences. Use linking words to explain your future plans logically and avoid incomplete thoughts.

예시: My future work plans are different from my current job because I am studying medicine. I hope to work in a hospital in the future.

× Actually currently I am studying in the school in Denha, it's called Sina.

✓ Actually, I am currently studying at a school in Denha called Sina.

The original sentence has awkward word order and incorrect preposition 'in' for 'school'. The correct preposition is 'at' when referring to attending a school. Also, 'currently' should be placed properly to improve sentence flow.

× I work in the small supermarkets in the town.

✓ I work in small supermarkets in the town.

The article 'the' before 'small supermarkets' is unnecessary unless referring to specific supermarkets already known. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural.

× It's a place that you can help people to do their to complete their shopping and to guide them to know every specific detail in the shop.

✓ It's a place where you can help people complete their shopping and guide them to know every specific detail in the shop.

The original sentence has redundant and awkward phrasing such as 'help people to do their to complete their shopping'. Simplifying to 'help people complete their shopping' improves clarity and grammar.

× Yes, it's very good place and perfect place actually to work.

✓ Yes, it's a very good and perfect place to work.

The article 'a' is missing before 'very good place'. Also, combining 'very good' and 'perfect' before 'place' with proper article usage improves sentence correctness.

× It is has a lot of benefits.

✓ It has a lot of benefits.

The phrase 'It is has' is incorrect. The correct form is 'It has' to indicate possession.

× to increase your knowledge in a different aspect of the work.

✓ to increase your knowledge in different aspects of the work.

The phrase 'a different aspect' is incorrect here because 'knowledge' is usually increased in multiple aspects. Also, 'different aspects' is plural and more appropriate.

× Yes, it's very good place and perfect place actually to work.

✓ Yes, it's a very good and perfect place to work.

Missing article 'a' before 'very good place' is a common error. Articles are necessary before singular countable nouns.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The question 'Would you like' implies a hypothetical or future preference, but the context suggests asking about current feelings, so 'Do you like' is more appropriate.

× Yes, I really like it and I really enjoy doing this work because as I said, it's helped me a lot in my life and it's the best thing that I can do in my free time.

✓ Yes, I really like it and enjoy doing this work because, as I said, it has helped me a lot in my life and it's the best thing I can do in my free time.

The phrase 'it's helped' should be 'it has helped' to correctly use present perfect tense. Also, 'I really enjoy' is better without repeating 'really' twice.

× It's only to organize my life and also to gain salary and helps me in the financial position in my life.

✓ It helps me organize my life, earn a salary, and improve my financial situation.

The original sentence is fragmented and awkward. Using 'It helps me' followed by parallel verbs improves clarity and grammar. 'Gain salary' is better expressed as 'earn a salary'. 'Financial position' is better as 'financial situation'.

× The my picture plans actually to work is different from the place that I work currently, which is because I studying around right now and medical matter.

✓ My future work plans are different from the place where I currently work because I am studying medical subjects right now.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'The my picture plans' is incorrect; 'picture' should be 'future'. 'I studying' lacks auxiliary verb 'am'. The sentence structure is confusing and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× So in the future the place that I would work is very different from the place it is actually will be in a hospital and.

✓ So in the future, the place where I will work will be very different; it will actually be in a hospital.

The original sentence is incomplete and has incorrect word order. 'I would work' should be 'I will work' to indicate future plans. The sentence needs to be completed and properly punctuated.