Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by adding a linking phrase and a bit more detail to make it more natural and effective. For example, start with a direct response and then add a supporting detail using linking words.

예시: I am currently working as a special educator in an organization. Specifically, I train children with special needs to help them develop essential skills.

제안: Your answer provides good details but can be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

예시: I work at a vocational institute that mainly focuses on improving communication skills and daily living activities. Additionally, I train the children in computer skills and painting to help them become more independent.

제안: Your answer is detailed and relevant. To improve, use linking words like 'because' or 'which' correctly and avoid minor grammatical errors for better fluency.

예시: Yes, definitely. My workplace is comfortable because all my colleagues and manager are considerate and supportive. Moreover, the peaceful and calm environment helps me stay focused and be more effective throughout the day.

제안: Your answer is positive but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Improve by using correct vocabulary ('supportive staff' instead of 'sporting stuff') and grammar, and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, definitely. I love working in my office because of the pleasant environment and supportive staff. I find it very rewarding to work with such professionals and to train children.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes for clarity.

예시: In the future, I plan to become an expert in my profession. Specifically, I will focus on training children with ADHD because they often face difficulties with communication and concentration.

× I work in an organization which is mainly A vocational institute.

✓ I work in an organization which is mainly a vocational institute.

The article 'A' should be in lowercase 'a' because it is used before a common noun in the middle of a sentence, not at the beginning. Articles should be lowercase unless they start a sentence.

× It majorly focus on improving communication skills and daily living activities.

✓ It majorly focuses on improving communication skills and daily living activities.

The subject 'It' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'focuses' to agree in number. The verb must have an 's' in the present tense for third person singular subjects.

× Apart from this, I also train them with computer skills and vocational training like painting to make them more independent.

✓ Apart from this, I also train them in computer skills and vocational training like painting to make them more independent.

The correct preposition to use with 'train' in this context is 'in' rather than 'with'. 'Train in' indicates the area or skill being taught.

× Yes, definitely my workplace is comfortable as all my colleagues and my manager are considerate and supportive.

✓ Yes, definitely, my workplace is comfortable as all my colleagues and my manager are considerate and supportive.

A comma is needed after 'definitely' to separate the introductory adverb from the main clause for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× Apart from this, the environment is very peaceful and calm which help me to stay focused and concentrate better and to be more effective throughout the day.

✓ Apart from this, the environment is very peaceful and calm which helps me to stay focused and concentrate better and to be more effective throughout the day.

The relative clause refers to 'environment' which is singular, so the verb should be 'helps' to agree in number.

× Yes, definitely. I love working in my office, as I already mentioned, because of the pleasant environment and sporting stuff.

✓ Yes, definitely. I love working in my office, as I already mentioned, because of the pleasant environment and supportive staff.

The word 'stuff' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'staff' meaning colleagues or employees. Also, 'sporting' is incorrect; 'supportive' fits the context better.

× I find it quite rewarding to work with such professional and to train children's.

✓ I find it quite rewarding to work with such professionals and to train children.

'Professional' should be plural 'professionals' to match 'such'. Also, 'children's' is possessive and incorrect here; it should be the plural noun 'children'.

× Well, in the future I plan to become an expert in my profession.

✓ Well, in the future, I plan to become an expert in my profession.

A comma after 'in the future' improves sentence clarity and flow, though the tense is correct.

× Mainly I will focus on training children with ADHD as they find difficulty in communicating and concentration.

✓ Mainly, I will focus on training children with ADHD as they find difficulty in communicating and concentrating.

A comma after 'Mainly' improves clarity. Also, 'concentration' should be 'concentrating' to parallel 'communicating' as gerunds after 'difficulty in'.