Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and a bit disorganised. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and aim for natural phrasing.

예시: I recently graduated in chemical engineering, but I don't currently have a permanent job. I tried a temporary position, but I found the fixed 9 to 5 hours difficult to manage, so I decided to look for other opportunities.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Start with a direct response, then explain briefly with linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and be more specific.

예시: I am not currently working because I left my temporary job due to inflexible hours. Now, I plan to work as a freelancer in the chemical engineering field.

제안: Your answer does not address the question. Even if you are not working, try to answer hypothetically or explain your situation clearly with a complete sentence.

예시: I am not working at the moment, so I cannot say if it is a good place to work. However, I hope to find a suitable job soon.

제안: Your answer is positive but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct sentence structure and linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

예시: Yes, I would like the place because it is close to my home. Additionally, it is easy to get there using public transport.

제안: Your answer shows good ideas but needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid informal language like 'wanna'.

예시: In the future, I want to work as a freelancer specialising in process design. To achieve this, I plan to become an expert in my field by studying abroad.

× Honestly I avoided chemical engineering and recently I finished it but I got temporary job and I gave it up because I can't indeed I couldn't endure 9:00 to 5:00 work and inflexible working.

✓ Honestly, I studied chemical engineering and recently I finished it, but I got a temporary job and I gave it up because I couldn't endure 9:00 to 5:00 work and inflexible working hours.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'avoided' which means to stay away from something, but the context suggests the student completed chemical engineering. Also, 'can't indeed I couldn't' is confusing and inconsistent in tense. The correction uses past tense consistently and clarifies the meaning.

× Honestly I avoided chemical engineering and recently I finished it but I got temporary job and I gave it up because I can't indeed I couldn't endure 9:00 to 5:00 work and inflexible working.

✓ Honestly, I studied chemical engineering and recently I finished it, but I got a temporary job and I gave it up because I couldn't endure 9:00 to 5:00 work and inflexible working hours.

The phrase 'got temporary job' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'temporary job'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner.

× Honestly I avoided chemical engineering and recently I finished it but I got temporary job and I gave it up because I can't indeed I couldn't endure 9:00 to 5:00 work and inflexible working.

✓ Honestly, I studied chemical engineering and recently I finished it, but I got a temporary job and I gave it up because I couldn't endure 9:00 to 5:00 work and inflexible working hours.

The phrase '9:00 to 5:00 work' is better expressed as '9:00 to 5:00 work hours' or '9:00 to 5:00 working hours' to clarify the meaning. Also, 'inflexible working' is incomplete; 'inflexible working hours' is more appropriate.

× I don't have any job because honestly I got temporary job but I couldn't endure inflexible hours working so I gave it up and decided to have freelancing. In chemical.

✓ I don't have any job because honestly I got a temporary job but I couldn't endure inflexible working hours so I gave it up and decided to do freelancing in chemical engineering.

The phrase 'inflexible hours working' is incorrect; it should be 'inflexible working hours'. Also, 'decided to have freelancing' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'decided to do freelancing'. The fragment 'In chemical.' is incomplete and should be expanded to 'in chemical engineering'.

× I don't have any job because honestly I got temporary job but I couldn't endure inflexible hours working so I gave it up and decided to have freelancing. In chemical.

✓ I don't have any job because honestly I got a temporary job but I couldn't endure inflexible working hours so I gave it up and decided to do freelancing in chemical engineering.

The phrase 'got temporary job' is missing the article 'a'. Also, 'freelancing' is a non-count noun and does not take 'have'; instead, 'do freelancing' is correct.

× Yes, I like it because it's near to my home and I easily to getting and I can use public transport to.

✓ Yes, I like it because it's near my home, and I can easily get there and use public transport too.

The phrase 'near to my home' should be 'near my home' as 'near' does not require 'to'. 'I easily to getting' is incorrect; it should be 'I can easily get there'. 'I can use public transport to' is incomplete; 'too' is the correct adverb meaning 'also'.

× Yes, I like it because it's near to my home and I easily to getting and I can use public transport to.

✓ Yes, I like it because it's near my home, and I can easily get there and use public transport too.

The original sentence lacks the modal verb 'can' before 'easily get'. Modal verbs are necessary to express ability or possibility.

× I wanna be be freelancer and process design, so I should be expert in my major. Therefore I decided to go abroad and study there.

✓ I want to be a freelancer and work in process design, so I should be an expert in my major. Therefore, I have decided to go abroad and study there.

'Wanna' is informal; 'want to' is preferred. 'Be be freelancer' has a repeated verb and missing article 'a'. 'Process design' needs a verb like 'work in'. 'Should be expert' requires the article 'an'. 'Decided' is past tense but the context suggests a recent decision, so 'have decided' is better.