Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答简洁明了，但可以稍微丰富内容，增加一些细节，使回答更自然流畅。

예시: I'm currently a university student at Beijing Technology and Business University, where I am studying Business Administration.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并注意主谓一致。

예시: I study Business Administration at Beijing Technology and Business University. I really like it because the atmosphere and environment are very pleasant.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议使用连词使句子更连贯，同时避免重复表达。

예시: Yes, it's a great place to study because the atmosphere helps me concentrate, and the beautiful environment with mountains, rivers, and trees makes it very pleasant.

제안: 回答不够完整且有语法错误，建议简化表达，明确列举活动，并避免不完整的句子。

예시: I definitely like this place because it allows me to do many activities, such as playing computer games in my room, playing basketball with my friends, and joining special clubs.

제안: 回答表达基本清晰，但句子结构稍显复杂，建议简化并使用更自然的表达方式。

예시: I don't have specific plans yet because I'm still studying, but I hope to become a manager or work in a job related to my major after graduation.

× I study at Beijing Technology and Business University right now and are majoring in Business administration.

✓ I study at Beijing Technology and Business University right now and am majoring in Business administration.

主语是第一人称单数“I”，谓语动词应使用第一人称单数形式“am”，而不是“are”。

× I found that the university where I where I study is very, very well because of its atmospheres and environments, so I love it very much.

✓ I found that the university where I study is very, very good because of its atmosphere and environment, so I love it very much.

“well”是副词，修饰动词；此处应使用形容词“good”来描述大学的状态。此外，“atmospheres”和“environments”应使用不可数名词单数形式“atmosphere”和“environment”。

× Yes, it's really a good place because they have a a great atmosphere to make me to make me concentrate on my study.

✓ Yes, it's really a good place because they have a great atmosphere that helps me concentrate on my study.

重复了“a a”，应删除多余的“a”。此外，“to make me to make me concentrate”结构重复且不正确，改为“that helps me concentrate”更自然。

× I definitely like this place where I study because this place allowed me to do a lot of things and activities what I want to do.

✓ I definitely like this place where I study because this place allows me to do a lot of things and activities that I want to do.

“allowed”时态不正确，应与现在时态保持一致用“allows”。“what I want to do”应改为“that I want to do”，因为“that”引导定语从句修饰“activities”。

× For example, playing computer games at A at in my room, playing basketball with my friend and taking some special.

✓ For example, playing computer games in my room, playing basketball with my friends and taking some special classes.

“at A at in my room”中多余且错误，应简化为“in my room”。“friend”应为复数“friends”，且“taking some special”不完整，应补充为“taking some special classes”。

× I don't have some plans about my future work because I'm still a university student so I have to finish my courses and work firstly, but I would say I envisage being a manager or some jobs suitable for my major in the future.

✓ I don't have any plans about my future work because I'm still a university student so I have to finish my courses and work first, but I would say I envisage being a manager or some jobs suitable for my major in the future.

“don't have some plans”表达不正确，应使用否定词“any”表示否定。将“firstly”改为“first”更符合口语习惯。