Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và phát âm để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Hãy tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, rõ ràng. Ngoài ra, nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I am currently an accountant for a foreign company specializing in real estate investment. I mainly handle financial statements and assist the company in managing its assets. I think it's a good job because it allows me to develop my skills.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý đến cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp, tránh lỗi sai như thiếu động từ hoặc sắp xếp từ không đúng. Hãy nói rõ ràng và mạch lạc, sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

예시: My company is located in Benton District, Ho Chi Minh City. Fortunately, it only takes me about 10 minutes to ride my motorbike from home to work.

제안: Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm, đồng thời sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và rõ ràng. Hãy dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because it is located in a central area, which makes it very convenient to get there. Also, my colleagues are very knowledgeable, so I can learn a lot from them.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp, tránh lỗi sai như "plane" thay vì "place" và "say" thay vì "22nd". Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối.

예시: Yes, absolutely. I really like the place where I work because it is located on the 22nd floor, so I have a fantastic view of the city. The atmosphere is pleasant and inspiring, which helps me stay motivated throughout the day.

제안: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "remove our leadership position". Hãy nói rõ ràng mục tiêu và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

예시: In the future, I plan to work here for two or three years to gain more experience and improve my skills. After that, I would like to take on a leadership position where I can contribute to important projects and help shape the company's development.

× Currently am accountant for a foreign company but but is that specialized in real estate investment?

✓ Currently, I am an accountant for a foreign company that specializes in real estate investment.

The original sentence lacks the subject 'I' and has repeated words 'but but'. Also, 'is that specialized' is incorrect; it should be 'that specializes' to correctly describe the company. The sentence structure is incorrect and needs proper subject and verb placement.

× I mainly handle financial state report and help the company manage it assess.

✓ I mainly handle financial statements and help the company manage its assets.

The phrase 'financial state report' is incorrect; the correct term is 'financial statements'. Also, 'manage it assess' is incorrect; it should be 'manage its assets'. The quantifiers and nouns used are incorrect and need to be replaced with proper terms.

× I I think uh, it's a good job.

✓ I think, uh, it's a good job.

The repetition of 'I' is unnecessary and incorrect. Removing the duplicate improves sentence clarity and correctness.

× My company located in Benton District, Ho Chi Minh City and my house luckily is it took about 10 minutes to ride motorbike today.

✓ My company is located in Benton District, Ho Chi Minh City, and luckily, my house is about 10 minutes away by motorbike today.

The original sentence misses the verb 'is' after 'company'. The phrase 'my house luckily is it took about 10 minutes to ride motorbike today' is awkward and incorrect. It should be restructured to clearly express the location and travel time. Sentence structure errors cause confusion here.

× Yes, it's a because it's located in central areas to convenient to to to go there and my college is a lot of knowledge so I can study from them a lot.

✓ Yes, it's good because it's located in a central area, making it convenient to go there, and my colleagues have a lot of knowledge, so I can learn a lot from them.

The phrase 'located in central areas to convenient to to to go there' is incorrect; it should be 'located in a central area, making it convenient to go there'. Also, 'my college is a lot of knowledge' is incorrect; it should be 'my colleagues have a lot of knowledge'. Incorrect prepositions and word choices cause confusion.

× Yes, absolutely. I really like the plane where I work because it's located on the say, 2022 floor, so I have a fantastic view of the city.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I really like the place where I work because it's located on the 22nd floor, so I have a fantastic view of the city.

The word 'plane' is a wrong pronoun here; it should be 'place'. Also, 'say, 2022 floor' is incorrect; it should be '22nd floor'. Incorrect pronoun and number usage cause misunderstanding.

× The atmosphere is also very pleasant and inspiring, which help me stay motivated throughout the day.

✓ The atmosphere is also very pleasant and inspiring, which helps me stay motivated throughout the day.

The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'which' referring to 'atmosphere'. Incorrect verb form causes subject-verb disagreement.

× In the future, I I have to work here to for two or three years to gain more experience and improve my skill.

✓ In the future, I plan to work here for two or three years to gain more experience and improve my skills.

The phrase 'I have to work here to for two or three years' is awkward and incorrect. Using 'plan to work' is more appropriate for expressing future intentions. Also, 'skill' should be plural 'skills' when referring generally. Modal verb usage and word choice need correction.

× After that, I would like to remove our leadership position where I can contribute to important system and help shape the company.

✓ After that, I would like to assume a leadership position where I can contribute to important systems and help shape the company.

The phrase 'remove our leadership position' is incorrect; it should be 'assume a leadership position'. Also, 'contribute to important system' should be 'contribute to important systems'. Incorrect prepositions and word choices cause confusion.