Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và nói đầy đủ câu, đồng thời sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn để diễn đạt lý do chọn ngành học. Hãy chú ý đến cấu trúc câu và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết.

예시: I am currently a student at ERU University, majoring in Business. I chose this major because my mother is a successful businesswoman, and I admire her skills and achievements.

제안: Bạn cần trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và diễn đạt rõ ý định nghề nghiệp trong tương lai.

예시: I don't work at the moment, but ideally, I would like to work for an international company where people from different countries can understand each other and collaborate effectively.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không chính xác. Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể để làm rõ lý do bạn nghĩ nơi làm việc đó tốt.

예시: Yes, I think it is a good place to work because I can receive a lot of support from my colleagues, which helps me improve my skills and feel comfortable at work.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp, đồng thời sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi sai và có cấu trúc tốt hơn. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do bạn thích nơi làm việc.

예시: Yes, I really like the people at my workplace. They always welcome us with a smile and an open heart, and they often give me meaningful advice to help me overcome difficulties in life.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi sai và diễn đạt rõ ràng kế hoạch tương lai. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do học tiếng Anh và nghề nghiệp mong muốn.

예시: In the future, I plan to become a flight attendant. Therefore, it is very important for me to learn English because language connects people from different cultures, and this job will allow me to meet many people from around the world.

× Now I'm a student who learns at ERU University and my major in business.

✓ Now I'm a student who studies at ERU University and my major is business.

The verb 'learns' is not commonly used to describe attending university; 'studies' is more appropriate. Also, 'my major in business' lacks the verb 'is' to form a complete sentence.

× The reason why I do this major because my mother is a business woman and I really admire her talent and that's why I was.

✓ The reason why I chose this major is because my mother is a businesswoman and I really admire her talent, and that's why I did.

The sentence is incomplete and incorrectly structured. 'Do this major' should be 'chose this major' to indicate past decision. 'That's why I was' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'that's why I did.' Also, 'business woman' should be one word 'businesswoman.'

× Ideally in the future I want to be an English individual and ideally I would work for an international company or a global event where people from different country make have understanding one another.

✓ Ideally, in the future, I want to be an English teacher and work for an international company or a global event where people from different countries can understand one another.

'English individual' is unclear; likely meant 'English teacher.' The phrase 'make have understanding one another' is incorrect; it should be 'can understand one another.' Also, 'different country' should be plural 'different countries.'

× Uh, to be honest, I think is a good way for me to work because at here I can receive a lot of support from, uh, my college colleague and yes.

✓ Uh, to be honest, I think it is a good place for me to work because here I can receive a lot of support from my college colleagues.

'I think is a good way' is missing the subject 'it.' 'At here' is incorrect; 'here' alone is sufficient. 'College colleague' should be plural 'college colleagues' to match the context.

× Yes, one thing I really like the lay where I work is the people.

✓ Yes, one thing I really like about the place where I work is the people.

'Lay' is a misspelling of 'place.' Also, the phrase 'like the lay' is incorrect; it should be 'like about the place.'

× The people here are welcome us with a not with a smiley and an open heart.

✓ The people here welcome us with a smile and an open heart.

'Are welcome us' is incorrect; it should be 'welcome us.' 'Smiley' is an adjective or noun for emoticons; the correct noun here is 'smile.' The phrase 'with a not with a smiley' is incorrect and confusing.

× They usually give me meaningful advice to overcome any difficulties in life.

✓ They usually give me meaningful advice to help me overcome any difficulties in life.

The sentence is mostly correct but adding 'help me' clarifies the purpose of the advice.

× In the future, I going to be a flight attendant, therefore it's very necessary for me to learn English because when our stock is learning English, I rely that how language connects people from different culture and that's why I want to be a family.

✓ In the future, I am going to be a flight attendant; therefore, it's very necessary for me to learn English because when our staff is learning English, I realize how language connects people from different cultures, and that's why I want to be part of the family.

'I going to be' is missing the auxiliary verb 'am.' 'Our stock' is incorrect; likely meant 'our staff.' 'I rely' should be 'I realize.' 'Different culture' should be plural 'different cultures.' 'I want to be a family' is unclear; 'be part of the family' is more appropriate.