Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and grammatically correct. Try to use complete sentences and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I am a student studying computer network technology, and I also work part-time in a warehouse."

예시: I am a student studying computer network technology, and I also work part-time in a warehouse.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and clearly, using linking words to explain your responsibilities and goals. For example, "I work in a warehouse where I pack items, and I hope to gain experience in supervising in the future."

예시: I work in a warehouse where I pack items, and I hope to gain experience in supervising in the future.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains many filler words which affect fluency. Try to speak more smoothly and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Yes, definitely. It is a good place to work because I am gaining experience that helps me develop my leadership skills."

예시: Yes, definitely. It is a good place to work because I am gaining experience that helps me develop my leadership skills.

제안: Your answer has good content but is unclear due to incorrect word choice and many fillers. Try to use appropriate vocabulary and clearer sentences. For example, "Definitely, I love working there because I have made good friends who are very supportive and help me when I need assistance."

예시: Definitely, I love working there because I have made good friends who are very supportive and help me when I need assistance.

제안: Your answer is understandable but grammatically incorrect and a bit unclear. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use correct grammar. For example, "I am studying to become a computer network technician, and in the future, I want to work in IT to improve my skills and learn more about technology."

예시: I am studying to become a computer network technician, and in the future, I want to work in IT to improve my skills and learn more about technology.

× Actually I'm student and I'm doing computer network technician study as well.

✓ Actually I'm a student and I'm doing computer network technician studies as well.

The noun 'student' is singular and requires the indefinite article 'a' before it. Also, 'study' should be pluralized to 'studies' to correctly refer to the course or field of study.

× I also do part time job in warehouse.

✓ I also do a part-time job in a warehouse.

The phrase 'part time job' needs the indefinite article 'a' and should be hyphenated as 'part-time job'. Also, 'warehouse' requires the indefinite article 'a' to indicate one warehouse.

× I have mentioned earlier that I am doing work in the warehouse where I pack some things and I also want to make a experience there of supervising.

✓ I mentioned earlier that I work in the warehouse where I pack some things and I also want to gain experience in supervising there.

The phrase 'I have mentioned earlier' is better as 'I mentioned earlier' for past reference. 'I am doing work' is better as 'I work' for habitual action. 'Make a experience' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'gain experience'. Also, 'of supervising' should be 'in supervising' to indicate the area of experience.

× Definitely, I love this place where I'm working, uh, because I, uh, make friends there, uh, who are very, uh, equifonic.

✓ Definitely, I love this place where I work because I make friends there who are very supportive.

The phrase 'where I'm working' is better as 'where I work' for habitual action. The word 'equifonic' is incorrect or nonstandard; likely the intended word is 'supportive' or similar. Also, unnecessary filler words like 'uh' should be omitted for clarity.

× They also help me when we, when I need.

✓ They also help me when I need it.

The phrase 'when we, when I need' is incomplete and confusing. The correct phrase is 'when I need it' to indicate assistance when required.

× Well, I'm doing study of computer network technician and I also want to become an IT job in the future which is also helped me to improve my skills as well as I also know about more technology.

✓ Well, I'm studying to become a computer network technician and I also want to have an IT job in the future which will help me improve my skills as well as increase my knowledge about technology.

The phrase 'I'm doing study of computer network technician' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I'm studying to become a computer network technician'. 'Become an IT job' is incorrect; one cannot become a job, so 'have an IT job' is correct. 'Which is also helped me' should be 'which will help me' to indicate future benefit. 'I also know about more technology' should be 'increase my knowledge about technology' for clarity and correctness.