Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question first, then provide relevant details. Avoid mentioning unrelated information and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and natural.

예시: I am currently a student at TSUI, where I am pursuing my studies. Previously, I completed a diploma in manufacturing at Goman College.

제안: Your answer does not directly address the question and is a bit confusing. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I am not working at the moment because I am a Bachelor of Science student. However, I plan to find a job after completing my degree.

제안: Your answer is unclear and does not directly respond to the question. Make sure to answer the question clearly and provide specific reasons or opinions. Avoid irrelevant information and use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: Since I am not working currently, I cannot comment on a specific workplace. However, I hope to work in a good company in the future where I can learn and grow.

제안: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Directly answer the question and provide reasons or expectations about your future workplace. Use simple and clear sentences with proper linking words.

예시: Although I am not working now, I would like to work in a friendly and supportive environment in the future because it helps me perform better.

제안: Your answer has the right idea but is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and specific.

예시: In the future, I plan to work in a company related to my Bachelor of Science degree in medical science. Specifically, I want to work in a medical laboratory to apply my knowledge and skills.

× I did my DSP from Goman College of manufacture.

✓ I did my DSP at Goman College of Manufacture.

The preposition 'from' is incorrectly used here; 'at' is the correct preposition to indicate the place where the course was completed. Also, 'manufacture' should be capitalized as it is part of the proper noun. This correction improves clarity and correctness.

× Actually recently I did not work but I am a student of Bachelor of Science.

✓ Actually, recently I have not been working but I am a student of Bachelor of Science.

The phrase 'did not work' is simple past tense, which is incorrect for a recent ongoing situation. Present perfect continuous or present perfect tense is appropriate to express recent or ongoing actions. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× I mentioned before I like Burger recently, but uh, in the future I definitely do some work.

✓ I mentioned before that I like Burger recently, but in the future I will definitely do some work.

The phrase 'I definitely do some work' is incorrect for future intentions; 'will definitely do' is the correct future tense form. Also, 'Burger' likely refers to a place or job, so 'that' is added for clarity.

× I mentioned before I did not work at the moment, but yes in the future I I have another shortly then I definitely got it.

✓ I mentioned before that I am not working at the moment, but yes, in the future I will have another opportunity shortly and I will definitely get it.

The phrase 'did not work at the moment' mixes past tense with a present time expression; present continuous 'am not working' is correct. 'I have another shortly' is unclear and corrected to 'I will have another opportunity shortly'. 'I definitely got it' is past tense and changed to future tense 'I will definitely get it' to match the intended meaning.

× I plan for my future that I work in a company and I'm also question mark Bachelor of Science from science for medical care and I plan to choose a job in the medical lab.

✓ I plan for my future to work in a company, and I have a Bachelor of Science in medical science. I plan to choose a job in a medical lab.

The phrase 'I work in a company' should be in infinitive form 'to work' after 'plan'. 'I'm also question mark Bachelor of Science from science for medical care' is unclear and corrected to 'I have a Bachelor of Science in medical science' for clarity and correctness. 'Choose a job in the medical lab' is fine but 'a medical lab' is more natural.