Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and informative but slightly long. Try to make it more concise and natural by combining ideas smoothly and avoiding listing too many details at once.

예시: I work as an educator at an organisation that trains children with special needs, including those with disabilities like cerebral palsy and autism.

제안: Avoid repeating information already mentioned. Also, complete your sentences fully and use linking words to connect ideas logically for better coherence.

예시: I work at a vocational institute that trains children with special needs to build their confidence and independence. For instance, they offer computer and vocational classes.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using linking words and making the description more fluid and natural. Also, avoid minor grammatical errors like singular/plural agreement.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because it is well equipped with facilities like interactive boards, spacious classrooms, and therapy rooms, which are essential for training children effectively.

제안: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, use more precise vocabulary to express your feelings naturally.

예시: Yes, I really like my workplace because it is comfortable, my colleagues are friendly, and the management is considerate, which makes working there enjoyable.

제안: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar correction. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about your goals. Avoid vague phrases like 'deal with number of children'.

예시: My future plan is to gain extensive experience by working with many children, so I can become a specialist in my field and contribute to serving the nation effectively.

× It mainly focus on training children with special needs so that they can be more confident and navigate independently in the society.

✓ It mainly focuses on training children with special needs so that they can be more confident and navigate independently in society.

The verb 'focus' should be in third person singular form 'focuses' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Also, 'in the society' is incorrect; 'in society' is the correct phrase without the definite article.

× For example, it provides computer classes and some vocational.

✓ For example, it provides computer classes and some vocational training.

The word 'vocational' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify. Adding 'training' completes the phrase correctly.

× There are a number of facilities such as interactive boards, spacious classroom, speech therapy room, physiotherapy room.

✓ There are a number of facilities such as interactive boards, spacious classrooms, speech therapy room, physiotherapy room.

The noun 'classroom' should be plural 'classrooms' to match the plural context of 'a number of facilities'.

× So it has all the facility which is required to train children.

✓ So it has all the facilities which are required to train children.

The noun 'facility' should be plural 'facilities' to match 'all the'. Also, the verb should be 'are' to agree with the plural subject 'facilities'.

× Well my goal is to excel in my profession by dealing with number of children so that I can gain efficient experience and knowledge.

✓ Well my goal is to excel in my profession by dealing with a number of children so that I can gain efficient experience and knowledge.

The phrase 'number of children' requires the article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× So this the major goal is to become specialist and serve the nation.

✓ So the major goal is to become a specialist and serve the nation.

The phrase 'this the major goal' is incorrect; it should be 'the major goal'. Also, 'specialist' needs the article 'a' before it.